3.20 Homework

2015-03-20 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Hi there! Good morning! Finally it's burning Friday. Have a good day. How can government reduce crime? I think that in order to reduce crime, we should be educated at personality from early childhood. When we check over the environment of criminals, they are often living in the brocken home. so to reduce the crime, I think that the government should look after them and make their life better. Thank you!

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday Mr. [이름]! Thank you for your untiring dedication in doing your daily homework. You can rest this weekend. I hope that you will have a great time with you wife.^^ ~Kelly^^ Hi there! Good morning! >> Correct. Finally, it\'s burning Friday. >> Correct. Have a good day. >> Correct.How can government reduce crime?I think that in order to reduce crime, we should be educated at personality from early childhood. >> I think that in order to reduce crime, we should be educated and trained from early childhood.   When we check over the environment of criminals, they are often living in the brocken home. >> When we check the background of the criminals, they are all products of a broken family. so to reduce the crime, I think that the government should look after them and make their life better.>> So to reduce crime, I think that the government should look after them and help them improve their lives.Thank you! >> Correct.

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