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2015-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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A few years ago, I went camping trip with my family. This was my first time and my last time because it was very difficult. So I don't want to go camping trip again. If I would go camping trip with my family again, I would bring some things. First, I must bring warm sleeping bag. In my first time,I didn't bring it so I had to sleep in my car. Second, I bring a lot of delicous foods because when my family go camping trip, we eat a lot of them. Last, I bring my cellphone I can listen to music and I can check the weather. These days the cellphone is very useful. Anyway I don't want to go camping trip. I don't like it.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!   It\'s great that you supported your point with examples. These are common expressions: 1. go camping/ go on a camping trip examples:  I don\'t want to go camping again.  I don\'t want to go on a camping trip again.   2. We often use would to express the so-called second and third conditionals: examples: If he lost his job he would have no money. If I had won the lottery I would have bought a car.   Teacher Venus^^   A few years ago, I went camping trip with my family. >>>A few years ago, I went on a camping trip with my family. This was my first time and my last time because it was very difficult. >>>CORRECT So I don\'t want to go camping trip again. >>>So I don\'t want to go camping again. If I would go camping trip with my family again, I would bring some things. >>>If I went camping with my family again, I would bring some things.First, I must bring warm sleeping bag. >>>First, I must bring a warm sleeping bag. In my first time,I didn\'t bring it so I had to sleep in my car. >>>In my first camping trip,I didn\'t bring it so I had to sleep in my car. Second, I bring a lot of delicous foods because when my family go camping trip, we eat a lot of them. >>>Second, I\'d bring a lot of delicious foods because we eat a lot of them. Last, I bring my cellphone I can listen to music and I can check the weather. >>>Last, I\'d bring my cellphone so I can listen to music and I can check the weather. These days the cellphone is very useful. >>>CORRECT Anyway I don\'t want to go camping trip. >>>Anyway I don\'t want to go on a camping trip.    I don\'t like it. >>>CORRECT

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