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2018-03-23 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Write an essay about the movie than inspired you. <name of movie : The Lord Of The Rings> My favorit movie is The lord of the rings. There are three stories. One of the most impressive things was The return of the king. There is one princess who is brave and strong. Her country was at war and she wanted to take part in a battle by warrior. So she participated in war despite opposing her father. In there, She ran into a strong enemy whom no one had won. He tolk her \"Any men cannot kill me.\" But she defeated him and said \"I am not man.\" Then I was very touch and knew how wonderful brave woman is. And I thought I should be progressive person rather than to be protected.

강사 첨삭

How are you CHOI?
Thanks for writing this. Keep practicing your writing skills, okay?
Happy weekend!
~Teacher Shanee^^,

Write an essay about the movie than inspired you.

<name of movie : The Lord Of The Rings>
>>> Name / Title of the movie: The Lord of the Rings
My favorit movie is The lord of the rings.
>>> My favorite movie is the Lord of the Rings.
There are three stories.
>>> It is a flim trilogy.
>>> OR: It has three installments.
One of the most impressive things was The return of the king.
>>> One of the most impressive things in the movie is the return of the king.
There is one princess who is brave and strong.
>>> Correct!
Her country was at war and she wanted to take part in a battle by warrior.
>>> Her country was at war and she wanted to take part in the battle of warriors.
So she participated in war despite opposing her father.
>>> So she participated in the war despite the opposition of her father.
In there, She ran into a strong enemy whom no one had won.
>>> In there, she ran into a strong enemy whom no one has even defeated.
He tolk her \"Any men cannot kill me.\"
>>> He told her, \"No man can kill me.\"
But she defeated him and said \"I am not man.\"
>>> OR: But she defeated him and said, \"I am not a man.\"
Then I was very touch and knew how wonderful brave woman is.
>>> Then, I was very touched and I admired the woman for how wonderful and brave she is.
And I thought I should be progressive person rather than to be protected.
>>> And I thought I should be a progressive and independent person instead of being someone who needs to be protected.

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