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학생이 쓴 원문
EXPERIENCE
1. Name of Co. : Canon Korea
Period of Experience : 2012/08 ~ 2012/12
▷ Job Position & Description
• Sales Canon camera to Chinese at Shila Dutie free store
• Speak Chinese to explain function of canon camera.
• Give customer useful information of shopping voucher.
2. Name of Co. : High Young-Jae academic School.
Period of experience : 2010/04~2010/ 12
▷ Job Position & Description
• Teach elementary and junior high school students as an instructor.
• Students made 90 point-average.
• Taught all subjects except math and English.
3. Name of Co. : Seoul Digital University
Period of Experience : 2008/8~2009/12
▷ Job Position & Description
• Work at solving barriers of internet class department.
• Using a remote control tool, help student solve computer problem.
강사 첨삭
Take note of my corrections Sir! Thank you!
-Teacher Chloe
EXPERIENCE>>EXPERIENCE: 1. Name of Co. : Canon Korea Period of Experience : 2012/08 ~ 2012/12
>>Correct!▷ Job Position & Description
>>Job Position & Description• Sales Canon camera to Chinese at Shila Dutie free store
>>Sales Canon camera to Chinese at Shila Dutie free store.• Speak Chinese to explain function of canon camera.
>>Speaks Chinese to explain functions of canon cameras.• Give customer useful information of shopping voucher. >>Give customers useful information about shopping voucher.2. Name of Co. : High Young-Jae academic School. Period of experience : 2010/04~2010/ 12
>>Correct!▷ Job Position & Description
>>Job Position & Description• Teach elementary and junior high school students as an instructor.>>Teaches elementary and junior high school students as an instructor.
• Students made 90 point-average.>>Just delete this information Sir. It is not necessarily needed.
• Taught all subjects except math and English.>>Teaches all subjects except math and English.3. Name of Co. : Seoul Digital University Period of Experience : 2008/8~2009/12>>Correct!▷ Job Position & Description
>>Job Position & Description• Work at solving barriers of internet class department.
>>Solving barriers of internet class department. • Using a remote control tool, help student solve computer problem.
>>Using a remote control tool, help students solve computer problems.
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