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2019-03-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Can you tell me about your favorite genre of music? Why do you like it? The genre of music l listen to depends on what kind of mood i am in. My favorite genre of music is Pop. By listening to my favorites, i feel relaxed and excited and then i used to hum a tune. 1. I sometimes watch these videos again i usually used to enjoy watching when i was young. One of things is Japen\\\'s masterpiece, ‘My Neighbor Totoro. It helps reduce low mood. 2. My music collection is composed of Pop and K-pop. Especially, i have no relish for noisy rock music. 3. Rasing pets may be hard thing. It is composed of looking after pets and having responsibilty for pets. 4. March is passing. The several favorite memories have piled up. Most of all, I consider what i look like after 1 years. 5. Two of these made me have no appetite. I will try another one.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

 


Thank you for sending your homework.


 


Cheers!

Jean


Can you tell me about your favorite genre of music? Why do you like it?

The genre of music l listen to depends on what kind of mood i am in. My favorite genre of music is Pop.

>> correct

 By listening to my favorites, i feel relaxed and excited and then i used to hum a tune.

>> By listening to my favorites, I feel relaxed and excited, and then I even hummed a tune.

 1. I sometimes watch these videos again i usually used to enjoy watching when i was young. One of things is Japen\\\'s masterpiece, ‘My Neighbor Totoro. It helps reduce low mood.
>> I sometimes rewatch the videos that I used to enjoy watching when I was young. One such films is Japan\'s masterpiece My Neighbor Totoro. Watching it helps brighten my mood.


 2. My music collection is composed of Pop and K-pop. Especially, i have no relish for noisy rock music.
>> correct


 3. Rasing pets may be hard thing. It is composed of looking after pets and having responsibilty for pets.
>> Raising pets may be a hard thing to do, but it involves looking after a living thing and having responsibility for it.

 4. March is passing. The several favorite memories have piled up. Most of all, I consider what i look like after 1 years.
>> March is passing and several of my favorite memories have piled up. Most of all, I\'m considering what I would look like after 1 year. 


 5. Two of these made me have no appetite. I will try another one.

>> Two of these made me lose my appetite. I will try another one.

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