3/29 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
I think it\'s possible to have that kind of house there in Jeju Island.
It\'s good to spend your late life in a beautiful place like that.
Start saving money now..^^
See you on Monday.
~Teacher Shanee^^,
[My ideal house]
I have a dream for my ideal house.
>>> I have a dream to build my ideal house.
I want to build three private houses with public garden, not apartment.
>>> I want to build three private houses with a public garden.
Apartment life is convenient, but I think private house life with garden is more happy to both of adult and children.
>>> Living in an apartment is convenient, but I think living in a private / separate house with a garden is a lot happier for both adults and children.
So, I will live in one private house.
>>> Correct!
I want to give two houses to my parents and my husbands\'s parents.
>>> I want to give the two houses to my parents and my husband\'s parents.
If so, I think we can live all together with proper privacy.
>>> If so, I think we can live better if there\'s privacy.
We can make party anytime we want.
>>> We can party anytime we want.
In order to achieve this dream, I have to earn money a lot, hahaha...
>>> In order to achieve this dream, I have to earn a lot of money. Hahaha!
I want to achieve my dream before 50 year\'s old.
>>> I want to achieve my dream before I turn 50 years old.
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