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2018-03-29 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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[My ideal house] I have a dream for my ideal house. I want to build three private houses with public garden, not apartment. Apartment life is convenient, but I think private house life with garden is more happy to both of adult and children. So, I will live in one private house. I want to give two houses to my parents and my husbands's parents. If so, I think we can live all together with proper privacy. We can make party anytime we want. In order to achieve this dream, I have to earn money a lot, hahaha... I want to achieve my dream before 50 year's old.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!

I think it\'s possible to have that kind of house there in Jeju Island.

It\'s good to spend your late life in a beautiful place like that.

Start saving money now..^^

See you on Monday.

~Teacher Shanee^^,


[My ideal house]

I have a dream for my ideal house.

>>> I have a dream to build my ideal house.
 I want to build three private houses with public garden, not apartment. 

>>> I want to build three private houses with a public garden.
 Apartment life is convenient, but I think private house life with garden is more happy to both of adult and children.

>>> Living in an apartment is convenient, but I think living in a private / separate house with a garden is a lot happier for both adults and children.
 So, I will live in one private house.

>>> Correct!
 I want to give two houses to my parents and my husbands\'s parents.

>>> I want to give the two houses to my parents and my husband\'s parents.
 If so, I think we can live all together with proper privacy.

>>> If so, I think we can live better if there\'s privacy.
 We can make party anytime we want.

>>> We can party anytime we want.
 In order to achieve this dream, I have to earn money a lot, hahaha...

>>> In order to achieve this dream, I have to earn a lot of money. Hahaha!
 I want to achieve my dream before 50 year\'s old.

>>> I want to achieve my dream before I turn 50 years old.

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