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In Korea, there is a policy \'voluntary retirement\'.
If those who were selected as the candidates for voluntary retirement, the company gives the money in months or annual salaries.
If the country\'s or market economy is okay, it would be okay to find another job right away.
But, most voluntary retirement is implemented when the market economy is extremely bad, so there is a risk that it is difficult to find another job.
The company must have good reason to fire employees.
Therefore, they evaluate the work performance for all employees every year.
People in the lower ranks repeat education and evaluation, and they eventually have to go out.
Sometimes a company makes embarrass employees who have failed a promotion to get out themselves.
It is not moral, but not illegal.
Some people say that the unemployment crisis of young people has occurred because dismissal is not easy in Korea and lazy people keep their jobs.
We need a proper system between employment stability and activation.
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In Korea, there is a policy \'voluntary retirement\'.
>> correct
For those who were selected as the candidates for voluntary retirement, the company gives the money in months or annual salaries.
For those who were selected as the candidates for voluntary retirement, the company gives the money in months or annual salaries.
>> correct ( instead of using if, we replace it with for)
If the country\'s or market economy is okay, it would be okay to find another job right away.
If the country\'s or market economy is okay, it would be okay to find another job right away.
>> correct
But, most voluntary retirement is implemented when the market economy is extremely bad, so there is a risk that it is difficult to find another job.
But, most voluntary retirement is implemented when the market economy is extremely bad, so there is a risk that it is difficult to find another job.
>> correct (awesome sentences)
The company must have good reason to fire employees. Therefore, they evaluate the work performance for all employees every year.
The company must have good reason to fire employees. Therefore, they evaluate the work performance for all employees every year.
>> correct (perfect)
People in the lower ranks repeat education and evaluation, and they eventually have to go out.
People in the lower ranks repeat education and evaluation, and they eventually have to go out.
>> correct
Sometimes a company makes embarrass employees who have failed a promotion to get out themselves.
Sometimes a company makes embarrass employees who have failed a promotion to get out themselves.
>> Sometimes a company harasses employees who failed to obtain promotion so they would voluntary leave the company.
It is not moral, but not illegal.
It is not moral, but not illegal.
>> correct
Some people say that the unemployment crisis of young people has occurred because dismissal is not easy in Korea and lazy people keep their jobs.
Some people say that the unemployment crisis of young people has occurred because dismissal is not easy in Korea and lazy people keep their jobs.
>> correct (amazing)
We need a proper system between employment stability and activation.
We need a proper system between employment stability and activation.
>> correct
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