3.31 homework

2023-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

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Poverty is not guilty, it just inconvenience. In the past, poverty is depend on individual effort. But nowadays, poverty is not personal false, it’s has wrong government’s policy. It can be rich, if I’m working hard. But it is more harder than past. The gap between rich and poor will be increase. Rich people is getting more rich, but poor people is getting more poor. At this time I think that government should devise good policies.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for your homework, Ye [이름]!
Keep expressing your thoughts!
-Hanna ^^
Poverty is not guilty, it just inconvenience.
>>Poverty is not a crime but an inconvenience.
In the past, poverty is depend on individual effort.
>>In the past, poverty is a result of individual effort.
But nowadays, poverty is not personal false, it’s has wrong government’s policy.
>> Nowadays, poverty is not caused by poor people but it is by the wrong government policies.
It can be rich, if I’m working hard. But it is more harder than past.
>>I can be rich if I work hard but it I need to work harder now than before.
The gap between rich and poor will be increase.
>>The gap between the rich and the poor will increase.
Rich people is getting more rich, but poor people is getting more poor.
>>Rich people are getting more rich but poor people are getting more poor.
At this time I think that government should devise good policies.
>>At this time, I think that the government should revise old policies and create good ones.

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