3-32th Homework

Hello there [이름]! ^_^

Thank you very much for taking the time to write in our composition board.

I think your essay was beautifully written.

Your thoughts are really good and so are your sentences.

Good job!

I think admitting that you are wrong at times is not a sign of weakness but rather a sign of bravery because not all people are strong enough to do that.

Anyhow, that is just my opinion in relation to this matter.

I hope you\'re doing great today.

See you again tomorrow. ^_^

~Teacher C[이름]

Sometimes, I feel like that.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Sometimes, I feel that way.
If I show a sign of weakness, they would neglect me.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> If I show that I am weak, they would abandon me.
Maybe, many people feel like that, so we don\'t want to show a weakness to others.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Many people probably feel that way, so we don\'t want to show any form of weakness to others.
In the man\'s world, it is very important since we are just men.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> For us men, this is very crucial because of our gender and our role in the society.
Men always want to rule all, men always want to place above all of others.

>> Men always want to rule and men always want to have a place above others.
It is a different trait from women.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> This is a trait that set apart men and women.

Also, many people don\'t want to make a mistake in their job or life.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Many people don\'t want to make a mistake in their job or life as well.
If I say another words, they are afraid of making a fault.

>> If I say it in other words, it means they are afraid of making a fault.
So, when we made a mistake, even if sometimes the opposit admited it, we always have the feeling that we had.

>> So, when we made a mistake, even if sometimes the opposite side admitted doing it, we always have the feeling that the fault was ours.
I think it would be useless but we inwardly keep it in order not to do again.

>> I think it would be useless but we inwardly keep it in order not to do it again.
So, men dislike to show a sign of weakness.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> So, men generally don\'t like showing any sign of weakness.
They feel that It is like dull or foolish.

>> They feel that it is dull or foolish.
Sometimes, showing a sign of weakness need a brave.

>> Sometimes, showing a sign of weakness is a sign of being brave.
Showing weakness is to request a help to someone.

>> Showing weakness is a way of requesting help from someone.
But requesting a help is not easy to someone who has a strong pride.

>> But requesting for help is not easy to someone who has a strong pride.
However, we don\'t live alone and we are not gods.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> However, we don\'t exist on our own and we are not gods.
So, we often need a help of others.

>> So, we often need help from others.