3-38th Homework

2017-02-09 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

In my real life, I haven't experienced the events that I could not forget until now. Instead of experience of my real life, I just heard of it from the news on a TV. I could hear about the heroes everyday who did some heroic things. Basically, all things in the world would be disappeared some day. It's very strange if it is always. All heroes, all kind of good stories, all kind of good or bad people, are just histories in our mind. We could not remember all of things. And we have to forget something some day, and then we remember new things. If we should remember something forever, people makes a history that we are able to learn on the textbook. That is the behavior that we remember all heroes and all heroic stories. Being be forgotten is very common in the society, and the thing that we can do something before being disappeared reminds it from our own heart. I think that's all. Anyway, my hero in the cyber world is the Superman. He can fly to the sky without any equipment.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon [이름]! :)

How\'s your day going so far?

Thank you for diligently answering our essay question for today. ^_^

I think it is true that some heroes are destined to be forgotten someday unless they are included in history books.

Our society changes from time to time and what people believe to be great today might be a taboo in the future.

The heroes today can be the villains of tomorrow.

Maybe that\'s why some heroes are forgotten.

Anyhow, that is my opinion.

I hope you\'re having a great day.

See  you again tomorrow.

~Teacher C[이름] :)

In my real life, I haven\'t experienced the events that I could not forget until now.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I haven\'t experienced events that I could not forget until now.
Instead of experience of my real life, I just heard of it from the news on a TV.

>> Instead of having experiences in real life, I just heard of it from the news on TV.

I could hear about the heroes everyday who did some heroic things.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I often hear about the heroes everyday who performed heroic things.
Basically, all things in the world would be disappeared some day.

>> Basically, all things in the world would disappear some day.
It\'s very strange if it is always.

>> [Do you mean]: It\'s very strange when it happens.
All heroes, all kind of good stories, all kind of good or bad people, are just histories in our mind.

>> All heroes, all kinds of good stories, all kinds of good or bad people, are just histories in our mind.
We could not remember all of things.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> It\'s difficult to remember all things.
And we have to forget something some day, and then we remember new things.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> We also have to forget something someday and remember new things.
If we should remember something forever, people makes a history that we are able to learn on the textbook.

>> [Do you mean]: If we should remember everything forever, then people don\'t have to write down history and we don\'t have to learn from textbooks.
That is the behavior that we remember all heroes and all heroic stories.

>> That is the behavior that we remember from all heroes and all heroic stories.
Being be forgotten is very common in the society, and the thing that we can do something before being disappeared reminds it from our own heart.

>> [Do you mean]: Being forgotten is very common in the society, and the things that we can do before we disappear remind people who we are and what we did.

I think that\'s all.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I think that\'s the most relevant thing about it.
Anyway, my hero in the cyber world is the Superman.

>> Anyway, my hero in the cyber world is Superman.
He can fly to the sky without any equipment.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> He can rove in the sky without any tools.

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