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Mother can be a good mother with her job.
In Korea, we call a mother who has her own job \'working mom\'.
There are many difficulties to maintain two jobs, mother and employee.
And all mothers say that they are not good at both mother and employee.
They are always sorry for not enough caring for their children and asham of themselves that they could not work more at a company.
But, I think we should know there is no perfection.
Even if they stay at home to care for children, they will not satisfy their love and caring.
And I believe that children must be happy when their mother is happy.
Self-confidence that we have a social role and are doing a social activity is very important to make a happy life.
Although making a family and sacrificing for them is very important and makes me mature, I and confident that every person has to have their own life.
Children may always want a mom at home, but sooner they will follow the mother\'s challenge and responsibility.
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-Rachel
Mother can be a good mother with her job.
>> A mother is always good with her job.
In Korea, we call a mother who has her own job \'working mom\'.
In Korea, we call a mother who has her own job \'working mom\'.
>> correct
There are many difficulties to maintain two jobs, mother and employee.
There are many difficulties to maintain two jobs, mother and employee.
>> correct
And all mothers say that they are not good at both mother and employee.
And all mothers say that they are not good at both mother and employee.
>> And all mothers say that they are not good at both being a mother and an employee.
They are always sorry for not enough caring for their children and asham of themselves that they could not work more at a company.
They are always sorry for not enough caring for their children and asham of themselves that they could not work more at a company.
>> They are always sorry for not enough caring for their children and are embarrassed of themselves that they could not work more at a company.
But, I think we should know there is no perfection.
But, I think we should know there is no perfection.
>> correct
Even if they stay at home to care for children, they will not satisfy their love and caring.
Even if they stay at home to care for children, they will not satisfy their love and caring.
>> correct
And I believe that children must be happy when their mother is happy.
And I believe that children must be happy when their mother is happy.
>> correct
Self-confidence that we have a social role and are doing a social activity is very important to make a happy life.
Self-confidence that we have a social role and are doing a social activity is very important to make a happy life.
>> Self-confidence is knowing that we have a social role and are doing a social activity is very important to make a happy life.
Although making a family and sacrificing for them is very important and makes me mature, I and confident that every person has to have their own life.
Although making a family and sacrificing for them is very important and makes me mature, I and confident that every person has to have their own life.
>> Although making a family and sacrificing for them is very important and makes me mature, I believe that every person has to have their own life.
Children may always want a mom at home, but sooner they will follow the mother\'s challenge and responsibility.
Children may always want a mom at home, but sooner they will follow the mother\'s challenge and responsibility.
>> correct
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