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I think that drugs or alcohol could help to create without prejudice and conventional wisdom.
Artists should express their minds or thoughts freely.
However, sometimes we suppress prejudice or conventional wisdom.
And sometimes we concern about people\'s eyes.
When we drink alcohol, we feel like we take courage.
So, drunken people become bolder and extreme.
It may make many problems.
But, I think it may help artists.
Occasionally, we can not understand the artists\' thoughts or expressions.
We know drugs or alcohol are not good human health.
So, I think it might be to exchange health with a burst of expression.
As a result, the method which gets help with alcohol or drugs is not continuous and positive.
Moreover, anyone can not get help with them for better performance except for artists.
If I will do experiments with alcohol, an accident will inevitably happen.
If I will write an article with alcohol, anyone can not understand what I am saying.
Nonetheless, alcohol helps us occationally
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Thanks for the insightful reply to the question I gave you:)
-Rachel
I think that drugs or alcohol could help to create without prejudice and conventional wisdom.
>> I think that drugs or alcohol could help to create something artistic without prejudice and conventional wisdom.
Artists should express their minds or thoughts freely.
>> correct
However, sometimes we suppress prejudice or conventional wisdom.
>> correct
And sometimes we concern about people\'s eyes.
And sometimes we concern about people\'s eyes.
>> And sometimes we are concerned about people\'s eyes.
When we drink alcohol, we feel like we take courage.
When we drink alcohol, we feel like we take courage.
>> correct
So, drunken people become bolder and extreme.
So, drunken people become bolder and extreme.
>> So, drunk people become bolder and extreme.
It may make many problems.
It may make many problems.
>> It may cause many problems.
But, I think it may help artists.
But, I think it may help artists.
>> correct
Occasionally, we can not understand the artists\' thoughts or expressions.
Occasionally, we can not understand the artists\' thoughts or expressions.
>> correct
We know drugs or alcohol are not good to human health.
We know drugs or alcohol are not good to human health.
>> correct
So, I think it might be to exchange health with a burst of expression.
So, I think it might be to exchange health with a burst of expression.
>> correct (awesome)
As a result, the method which gets help with alcohol or drugs is not continuous and positive.
As a result, the method which gets help with alcohol or drugs is not continuous and positive.
>> correct
Moreover, anyone can not get help with them for better performance except for artists.
Moreover, anyone can not get help with them for better performance except for artists.
>> correct
If I will do experiments with alcohol, an accident will inevitably happen.
If I will do experiments with alcohol, an accident will inevitably happen.
>> correct (perfect)
If I will write an article with alcohol, anyone can not understand what I am saying.
If I will write an article with alcohol, anyone can not understand what I am saying.
>> correct
Nonetheless, alcohol helps us occasionally.
Nonetheless, alcohol helps us occasionally.
>> correct
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