3. 7 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Before I use a smart phone which compose of internet, I should contact my friends making a call or sending text massages using a cellphone. In that time, I only contact my friends when I have some important business but now, I\'m using a smart phone and I feel that I\'m with my friends for 24 hours. I always keep my smart phone and check the SNS messages. My boyfriend is far from my place but we send a photo or feelings anytime for 24 hours so we don\'t feel lonely.
Before I use a smart phone which can easily access internet, I should contact my friends by making calls and sending text messages using an ordinary phone. During that time, I can only contact my friends when I have some important business with them, but now, I use smart phone and I feel that I\'m with my friends 24/7. I always keep my smart phone and check SNS messages. My boyfriend is living far from my place, but we can send photos or talk to each other anytime so we don\'t feel lonely.
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