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2017-02-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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What do you think about the health care system in your country? How could it be improved? I am working for a long time since I was in my early 20th. So, I had to pay medical insurance premium to my government. I thought it was waste of money because when I was youth, I didn't need to go to the hospital. However, after I became in my early 40th, I can check my health in free because my paying medical insurance premium. But it is not enough to check my health. Because If I get some ill, I have to pay a lot of money for myself. I can't believe my government so I have private health insurance. It is not good way because most people feel uncomfortable like me.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!

I think yours is better still than ours here in the Philippines. I mean the medical health insurance provided by the government.

Take care!

~T. Lynn

What do you think about the health care system in your country? How could it be improved?

>> correct!
 I am working for a long time since I was in my early 20th.

>>I had been working for along time since my early 20s.
 So, I had to pay medical insurance premium to my government.

>> correct!
 I thought it was waste of money because when I was youth, I didn\'t need to go to the hospital.

>> I thought it was waste of money because when I was young, I didn\'t need to go to the hospital.
 However, after I became in my early 40th, I can check my health in free because my paying medical insurance premium.

>> However, after I enter my early 40s, I can check my health for free because I had been paying my medical insurance premium.
 But it is not enough to check my health.

>> correct!
 Because If I get some ill, I have to pay a lot of money for myself.

>> Because If I get sick, I\'ll have to pay a lot of money for myself/hospitalization.
 I can\'t believe my government so I have private health insurance.

>> correct!

 It is not a good way because most people feel uncomfortable like me.

>> correct!

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