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Hi there Ms. [이름]!
With many things to study and prepare for school and their academy, children have to learn a lot of things everyday. I think it\'s better if they\'ll lessen their loads or subjects in school. But I don\'t think that\'s going to happen anytime soon.(\",)
Take care!
~T. Lynn
The Fourth Industrial Revolution will be very development in near the future.
>> The Fourth Industrial Revolution will be very developed in the near future.
Nowadays smart home techonlogy is coming near our life step by step.
>> Nowadays smart home techonlogy is coming nearer our lives step by step.
So I want my children that they learn about the fourth industrial revolution for their future.
>> So I want my children to they learn about the fourth industrial revolution for their future.
But I don\'t impose to them.
>> correct!
I think it is very difficult to learn for a long time.
>> correct!
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