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2017-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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In the future, many doctors and nurses don't need anymore. I watched that on the TV program because of Robot of doctor. I don't like to change it. Human is very important in the future. Technology has to develop for human but it is not important more than human.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)

Many movies had been made about humans versus the machines. It\'s actually scary if you think about it but I believe machines/robots could never survive without humans so don\'t worry.(\",)

Take care!

~T. Lynn 

In the future, many doctors and nurses don\'t need anymore. I watched that on the TV program because of Robot of doctor.

>> In the future, many doctors and nurses aren\'t needed anymore. I watched that on a TV program. This is because of Robot doctors. 
 I don\'t like to change it.

>> correct!
 Human is very important in the future.

>> Humans are very important in the future.
 Technology has to develop for human but it is not important more than human.

>> Technology has to develop for humans but it is not  more important than humans.

OR>> Technological developments are very important for humans but humans are still above new technology.   

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