3

2018-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

The healthy mental is the most important in our life to live together. These days, the mental of many kids become ill because of the games. In my case, I allow my children to spend time with the games for an hours. But it is not easy. Maybe they play the games behind me.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)

Teachers and parents alike have a hard time dealing with children today because of computers and smartphone games. They get addicted to these games.

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn   

The healthy mental is the most important in our life to live together.

>> A healthy mentality is the most important to live together harmoniously.
 These days, the mental of many kids become ill because of the games.

>> These days, many kids get mental illness because of playing too much games.
 In my case, I allow my children to spend time with the games for an hour.

>> In my case, I only allow my children to spend an hour to play games.
 But it is not easy.

>> correct!
 Maybe they play the games behind me.

>> correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·