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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)
Teachers and parents alike have a hard time dealing with children today because of computers and smartphone games. They get addicted to these games.
Take care!(\",)
~T. Lynn
The healthy mental is the most important in our life to live together.
>> A healthy mentality is the most important to live together harmoniously.
These days, the mental of many kids become ill because of the games.
>> These days, many kids get mental illness because of playing too much games.
In my case, I allow my children to spend time with the games for an hour.
>> In my case, I only allow my children to spend an hour to play games.
But it is not easy.
>> correct!
Maybe they play the games behind me.
>> correct!
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