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2018-10-05 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Hi. Yesterday, I mention these sentences. Could you check it, please? At present, I live in the countryside. I like living in the countryside because there is fresh air which is important in our lives. The countryside is a very quiet and nice place to live in, but I would like to live in metropolitan of Korea which is an ideal place for education. Despite, I don't like Seoul, Korea's capital city, because there are many cars and much pollution. When I was young, there was nowhere to go shopping in my neighborhood. I had to take bus to go shopping. But a few years ago, an outlet mall was built near my house. So I don't take the bus to go shopping now. I like this place very much because I feel comfort in it.

강사 첨삭

Hi.
Yesterday, I mention these sentences.
Could you check it, please?

At present, I live in the countryside.

>> Correct

or

>> I currently live in the countryside.
 I like living in the countryside because there is fresh air which is important in our lives.

>> Correct

or

>>> I like living here because of the fresh air.
 The countryside is a very quiet and nice place to live in, but I would like to live in metropolitan of Korea which is an ideal place for education.

>> Correct

or

>>> The countryside is a peaceful and favorable to live in. However, I would want to also live in the city that is an ideal place for education.
 Despite, I don\'t like Seoul, Korea\'s capital city, because there are many cars and much pollution.

>> Nonetheless, I don\'t like Seoul, the capital city of Korea because there are too many cars and pollution.
 When I was young, there was nowhere to go shopping in my neighborhood.

>> Correct
 I had to take bus to go shopping.

>> I have to take a bus to go to shopping malls.
 But a few years ago, an outlet mall was built near my house.

>> Correct
 So I don\'t take the bus to go shopping now.

>> So, I don\'t have to take the bus to go to the shopping mall anymore.
 I like this place very much because I feel comfort in it.

>> Correct

or

>>> I love this place and I feel comfort in it.

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