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Hi.
Yesterday, I mention these sentences.
Could you check it, please?
At present, I live in the countryside.
>> Correct
or
>> I currently live in the countryside.
I like living in the countryside because there is fresh air which is important in our lives.
>> Correct
or
>>> I like living here because of the fresh air.
The countryside is a very quiet and nice place to live in, but I would like to live in metropolitan of Korea which is an ideal place for education.
>> Correct
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>>> The countryside is a peaceful and favorable to live in. However, I would want to also live in the city that is an ideal place for education.
Despite, I don\'t like Seoul, Korea\'s capital city, because there are many cars and much pollution.
>> Nonetheless, I don\'t like Seoul, the capital city of Korea because there are too many cars and pollution.
When I was young, there was nowhere to go shopping in my neighborhood.
>> Correct
I had to take bus to go shopping.
>> I have to take a bus to go to shopping malls.
But a few years ago, an outlet mall was built near my house.
>> Correct
So I don\'t take the bus to go shopping now.
>> So, I don\'t have to take the bus to go to the shopping mall anymore.
I like this place very much because I feel comfort in it.
>> Correct
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>>> I love this place and I feel comfort in it.
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