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2019-03-08 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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I don’t agree that the smartphone is the best invention. For sure it gives benefits to human, but there are so many sideeffects. People do not communicate with each other face to face. Also it causes a serious neck pain.

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Good evening Ms. [Name] [이름]^^

Thanks for answering your homework :)

I complete agree with you, I think it\'s one of the least thing ever invented.

These days children don\'t even talk to their parents and vice versa because of this invention.

Yes, it has many advantages as well as disadvantages :(


Writing Task: Smartphones are probably the most important invention of all time. - Unknown. Do you agree? Why? Why not? 


I don’t agree that the smartphone is the best invention.

>>I don\'t agree that smartphones are the best inventions.

For sure it gives benefits to human, but there are so many sideeffects.

>>It certainly benefits humans, but there are many side effects.

People do not communicate with each other face to face.

>>People don\'t communicate face to face with each other.

Also it causes a serious neck pain.

>>It also causes serious neck pain.

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