3 activities I would like to do when I travel abroad!
학생이 쓴 원문
These days, because of the pandemic, people all around the world can\'t travel abroad. I\'m really sad about this situation, but I try to change my feeling by imagining activities I\'d like to do.
First, I want to go skydiving in Austrailia. I actually love Winner, one of K-pop idol groups. They did it in Austrailia, and they loved it! It might be a little bit scary, but it would be a really valuable experience.
Second, I\'d like to learn scuba diving in the Philippines. I want to visit Cebu, because many people who have visited Cebu say that it is a beautiful city.
Finally, I want to enjoy tango performances in Argentina. I have watched a TV program named \'Traveler\', and it introduced Argentina. I like the atmosphere of the country. Especially, I hope to watch a tango performance in a good restaurant.
One day, I will make those dreams come true. I hope that the world without COVID-19 arrive soon!
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Thank you for sharing your plans! I am very optimistic that you will enjoy all these activities soon! -Faith-
These days, because of the pandemic, people all around the world can\'t travel abroad. >> CORRRECT
OR: Nowadays, coronavirus hinders people from traveling abroad.
I\'m really sad about this situation, but I try to change my feeling by imagining activities I\'d like to do.
>> CORRECT
OR: This situation makes me feel down but I try to reverse this feeling by visualizing the activities I\'d like to do in the future.
First, I want to go skydiving in Austrailia. I actually love Winner, one of K-pop idol groups. They did it in Austrailia, and they loved it!
First, I want to go skydiving in Austrailia. I actually love Winner, one of K-pop idol groups. They did it in Austrailia, and they loved it!
>> First, I want to go skydiving in Australia because Winner, my favorite K-pop idol group, did it there and they loved it.
It might be a little bit scary, but it would be a really valuable experience.
>> CORRECT
>> CORRECT
Second, I\'d like to learn scuba diving in the Philippines.
>> CORRECT
OR: Second, I\'m interested in learning scuba diving in the Philippines.
I want to visit Cebu, because many people who have visited Cebu say that it is a beautiful city.
>> I want to visit Cebu because many people who have visited there said that it is a beautiful city.
>> I want to visit Cebu because many people who have visited there said that it is a beautiful city.
Finally, I want to enjoy tango performances in Argentina.
>> CORRECT
I have watched a TV program named \'Traveler\', and it introduced Argentina.
>> CORRECT
OR: I watched a TV program with the title \'Traveler\' and it introduced Argentina.
I like the atmosphere of the country.
>> CORRECT
Especially, I hope to watch a tango performance in a good restaurant.
>> CORRECT
OR: Especially, I am looking forward to seeing a tango performance in a fancy restaurant.
One day, I will make those dreams come true.
>> CORRECT
OR: Someday, I will make all these things possible.
I hope that the world without COVID-19 arrive soon!
>> I hope that the world without COVID-19 arrives soon!
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