3. Topic: life (preparing for the conversation final exam in my school)
학생이 쓴 원문
So let's go to the third. Enjoying my job. As I said what I want to do in the future, If I chose electronic engineering besides economics, I would not happy. Human has its own interests and ability. Your choice makes your life happiness.
So I told you about what is the best way to make my life successfully. And before that I said what I want to do in the future. These are the main points when I am heard your question 'what is life?'.
-The end-
(I gave you writing about life divided into three parts.)
강사 첨삭
Hi there! How are you? I am enjoying reading this composition of yours. I am happy to know this things about you. All the things you think you want in life, things that makes you happy.I will see in the class later. Thanks for dropping in your composition.
^^T.Sheela^^..
Here are my corrections for you:
So let\'s go to the third.
>>So let\'s go to the third part.
Enjoying my job.
>>I am enjoying my job.
As I said what I want to do in the future, If I chose electronic engineering besides economics, I would not happy.
>>As I said, If I choose Electronic Engineering against Economics, I will not be happy.
Human has its own interests and ability.
>>Humans have their own interests and abilities.
Your choice makes your life happiness.
>>Your choice makes your happy.
So I told you about what is the best way to make my life successfully.
>>So I told you about the things that will make my life successful.
And before that I said what I want to do in the future.
>>And I also told you the things I want to do in the future.
These are the main points when I am heard your question \'what is life?\'.>> These are what I thought when I heard your question,\" what is life?.-The end->> The end
(I gave you writing about life divided into three parts.)
>> I gave you a writing about life which is divided into three parts.
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