31st July 2012 - Review(1)
학생이 쓴 원문
Good afternooon!
Here is our dialogue script today.
Accroding to the today’s forcast information, tow typhoon is approaching from Taiwan and Japn to China after passing by Korea.
So I’m now watching out the movement of two typoon because it is vital factor to manage company ship’s operation.
Anyway, I would be grateful if we are talking about rejoining with my ex-grilfriend following our conversation yesterday.
After talking about my story today, we will enjoy hearing about your love story tomorrow! Are you ready?!
Luckily, now with my x-grilfriend, I am able to talk with naturally more than separation period since we met last weekend again.
For example, whenever I think of her, I send massage to her and receive reply from her at the same time. Besids, I occasionally act charming again to her because she is 2 years senior to me so she loves my charming activity or invoice.
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
Thank you for your composition today! I was very happy to see your composition. I really enjoyed our conversation today. I\'ll tell you about my story in our class alter. Take care and have a great time!
T. Kelly ^^
Good afternooon!>>Correct!Here is our dialogue script today.>>Correct!Accroding to the today’s forcast information, tow typhoon is approaching from Taiwan and Japn to China after passing by Korea.
>>According to the forecast today, two typhoons are approaching from Taiwan and Japan to China after passing by Korea.So I’m now watching out the movement of two typoon because it is vital factor to manage company ship’s operation.>>So I\'m now monitoring the movement of the two typhoons because it is vital to manage our company\'s ships operations.Anyway, I would be grateful if we are talking about rejoining with my ex-grilfriend following our conversation yesterday.
>>Anyway, I am grateful that we were able to talk about my reunion with my ex-girlfriend.After talking about my story today, we will enjoy hearing about your love story tomorrow!
>>After talking about my story today, I would love to hear your love story tomorrow!
Are you ready?! >>Correct!Luckily, now with my x-grilfriend, I am able to talk with naturally more than separation period since we met last weekend again.
>>Luckily, now with my ex-girlfriend, I am able to talk about our separation more naturally since we met last weekend.
For example, whenever I think of her, I send massage to her and receive reply from her at the same time.
>>For example, whenever I think of her, I send her a message and I receive an immediate reply.
Besids, I occasionally act charming again to her because she is 2 years senior to me so she loves my charming activity or invoice.
>>Asides from that, I occasionally act charming again around her because she is 2 years my senior so she loves it when I\'m charming her.
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