31st July 2012 - Review(2)

2012-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

학생이 쓴 원문

Following review(1), I wrote the rest of our dialogue today below. But, one problem is still remain. We are now worry about how we approach our my and her parents. After considering with a number of things, I decide to write a letter to her parents for a start. I will write a letter saying that we are still falling in love each other and we can live well even after marriage, so please give us another Chance to meet again. Because I first said to goodbye to her, I was so sorry much more than my x-grilfriend. So I determined that I highly have got to show my plans and passion to her parents. Oh, time is flying. If time were allowed for us, we would be happy to hear your love story. I’m sorry the fact that our time is too short. But I’m ok because there is tomorrow! ^^ Enjoy the rest of your today!

강사 첨삭

Wow! That would be very challenging to talk to her parents and tell them how you feel. I\'m wishing you all the luck in doing that and I admire you for that. Tell me more about it tomorrow. ^^ T. Kelly Following review(1), I wrote the rest of our dialogue today below.>>Correct!But, one problem is still remain. >>But one problem still remains.We are now worry about how we approach our my and her parents. >>We are now worried about how we\'ll approach our parents.After considering with a number of things, I decide to write a letter to her parents for a start. >>After considering a number of things, I decided to write a letter to her parents.I will write a letter saying that we are still falling in love each other and we can live well even after marriage, so please give us anotherChance to meet again. >>I will write a letter saying that we are still in love with each other and we can live well even after marriage. So I asked them to give us a chance to meet us again.Because I first said to goodbye to her, I was so sorry much more than my x-grilfriend. >>Because when I first said goodbye to her, I was  much more sorry than my ex-girlfriend. So I determined that I highly have got to show my plans and passion to her parents.>>So I\'m determined to show her parents my plans and passion.Oh, time is flying. >>Correct!If time were allowed for us, we would be happy to hear your love story. >>If time will allow, I would be happy to hear your love story. I’m sorry the fact that our time is too short. >>I\'m sorry because our time is too short.But I’m ok because there is tomorrow! ^^ >>But I\'m ok because there is still tomorrow. Enjoy the rest of your today! >>Correct!

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