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Near the house where I live is a big grocery store. I often go there with my family. I can buy there cheap a lot so I spend money a lot. So when I go to the grocery store, I make a shopping list because it saves me my money and time. I usually buy seasonal fruits. Also I like going there time of the night because the grocery store offers a little discount. Also I can lose some weight.

Hello [이름]!   Thank you for submitting your homework early. I noticed that your answer is a bit short. Some reminders: Ideas don’t make much sense if they aren’t arranged in some way. Show the connections in the sentences. The ideas should be expressed clearly and logically, and supported with reasons and examples. These factors make it easy for the reader to follow the argument and intentions of the writer.   Teacher Venus^^   Near the house where I live is a big grocery store. >>>CORRECT I often go there with my family. >>>CORRECT I can buy there cheap a lot so I spend money a lot. >>>I can buy there a lot of cheap things. >>>OR: I spend a lot of money buying things. So when I go to the grocery store, I make a shopping list because it saves me my money and time. >>>So when I go to the grocery store, I make a shopping list because it saves my money and time. I usually buy seasonal fruits. >>>CORRECT Also I like going there time of the night because the grocery store offers a little discount. >>>Also I like going there at night because the grocery store offers a little discount. Also I can lose some weight. >>>CORRECT >>>better: Also I can lose some weight because I walk whenever I go there.