35. Homework
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Thanks for doing your homework, Jason ^^
Reading your paragraph broke my heart TT
I am so happy because you still looked on the bright side :)
When I was in university at second grade, I wanted to get a scholarship that I had never gotten.
>>When I was a second grade university students, I wanted to get a scholarship that I never got.
Furthermore, I thought it was the best way to support my parents regarding for the finance since I couldn’t have enough money to give them due to the fact that I had finished military service.
>> Furthermore, I thought it was the best way to support my parents financially since I couldn’t have enough money to give them due to the fact that I had just finished military service.
Hence, I studied super hard during a daytime in the class room and night time in the library.
>>Hence, I studied super hard during the daytime in the classroom and nighttime in the library.
Finally, I met final exams and took a lot of tests about my major.
>> Finally, I had final exams and took a lot of tests about my major.
While I was taking theory of electro-magnetics, which was the hardest test during that season, my friend asked me to borrow my paper for a cheating.
>>While I was taking the test regarding the theory of electromagnetics, which was the hardest test during that season, my friend asked me to borrow my paper for cheating.
And I gave him my paper that already solved by me since I finished it easily.
>>And I gave him my paper that I already solved since I finished it easily.
After finishing all the tests, I guessed that I got the scholarship, which no need to pay next semester.
>>After finishing all the tests, I guessed that I got the scholarship which means I don\'t have to pay for the next semester.
But, unfortunately, a student sued me to the professor and I got half score that I took from the perfect score.
>>But, unfortunately, a student sued me to the professor and my score was deducted 50 percent.
Thus, I just got 2nd scholarship, which needs to pay half price for a next semester, owing to the theory of electro-magnetics.
>>Thus, I just got the 2nd scholarship, which only covers half the price for the next semester, owing to the theory of electromagnetics.
At the first time, I blamed them such as a friend who asked me to cheat my paper, a person who sued me to the professor, a professor who gave me a half score only.
>>At the first time, I blamed all of them-the friend who asked me to cheat my paper, the person who sued me to the professor, and the professor who gave me a half score only.
But I have realized that was my fault since I decided to lend my paper to him.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this, I got a moral that I have to choice carefully after thinking about something a lot of times if I have to do something together and don’t be able to blame the others since I agreed with the other’s opinion.
>>Because of this, I got a moral lesson that I have to choose carefully after thinking about something a lot of times, and if I have to do something with another person, and I won\'t blame the others since I agreed with them.
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