36. Homework

2018-01-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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What standards of behavior should teachers set? I have seen issues regarding of terrible teachers First example, a few teachers whom take care babies instead of their parents in the day care center. They gave damages to babies and kids who can’t express their feeling well many kind of method such as hitting, kicking, and picking using needles. Furthermore, they fed kid meals by force and if they refused to eat it then struck them in front of other kids. Accordingly, the others shown fear faces, and moved to the side places silently and then flopped their knees with shacking bodies. And second, a baby who looks 2 or 3 years always cried when he was going out in front of the main door. At the first time, she thought her baby didn’t want to apart from mother’s area that’s why she wept. Hence, the mother guessed that would be better after the baby adjusted the feeling with her baby sitter. But it didn’t become better and she extremely sobbed more. The fact of the reason was detected by a security guard because of the regularly check of CCTV. After the she gave her baby to the baby sitter and finished to close the door of elevator, a baby-sitter struck the baby in the elevator until it opened. I guess it’s not only elevator but also other closed places too. It was famous problems few months ago. And I guess that it happens until now unfortunately. Therefore, in my opinion teachers should have fallowing abilities First, they must know how to handle their feelings to the babied and kids even if they make mistakes. Second, they need to ask their students the reasons based on their mistakes and listen carefully first. Moreover, they need to understand their situations, find a solution if they can, and suggest it to the students making them right life. Third, they should know that punishments are not suitable for the students. If students understand what they did wrong, they will change mistakes to the correct since it’s a humans basic characteristic.

강사 첨삭

Teachers are definitely humans, too :)

We get angry, hurt, disappointed, and we do imperfect things.

However, this form of discipline is really unacceptable.

Expressing anger beyond proper ways is really insane.

Thanks for this, Jason^^

What standards of behavior should teachers set?
>>CORRECT!
I have seen issues regarding of terrible teachers

>>I have seen issues regarding terrible teachers.
 First example, a few teachers whom take care babies instead of their parents in the day care center.

>>I have seen issues regarding terrible teachers such as those who take care of babies in the day care center.

 They gave damages to babies and kids who can’t express their feeling well many kind of method such as hitting, kicking, and picking using needles.

>> They inflict damage on babies and kids who can’t express their feelings well by many kinds of methods such as hitting, kicking, and picking using needles.

 Furthermore, they fed kid meals by force and if they refused to eat it then struck them in front of other kids.

>>Furthermore, they fed kid meals by force and if they refused to eat it, they struck them in front of other kids.

Accordingly, the others shown fear faces, and moved to the side places silently and then flopped their knees with shacking bodies.
>>
Accordingly, the others shown fear faces, and moved to the side places silently and then flopped their knees with shacking bodies. 
And second, a baby who looks 2 or 3 years always cried when he was going out in front of the main door.

>>CORRECT!
At the first time, she thought her baby didn’t want to apart from mother’s area that’s why she wept.

>>At the first time, the mother thought her baby didn’t want to be apart from her that’s why she wept.

Hence, the mother guessed that would be better after the baby adjusted the feeling with her baby sitter.

>>Hence, the mother guessed that would be better after the baby adjusted the feeling with her babysitter.

But it didn’t become better and she extremely sobbed more.

>>CORRECT!

 The fact of the reason was detected by a security guard because of the regularly check of CCTV.

>> The reason was detected by a security guard because of the regular check of the CCTV.

 After the she gave her baby to the baby sitter and finished to close the door of elevator, a baby-sitter struck the baby in the elevator until it opened.

>> After that, she gave her baby to the babysitter and the door of the elevator closed, the babysitter struck the baby in the elevator until it opened.

guess it’s not only elevator but also other closed places too.

>>I guess it did not only happen in the elevator, but other places as well.
 It was famous problems few months ago.

>>It was a famous problem a few months ago.

And I guess that it happens until now unfortunately.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore, in my opinion teachers should have fallowing abilities
>>
Therefore, in my opinion teachers should have the following abilities:
First, they must know how to handle their feelings to the babied and kids even if they make mistakes.
>>
First, they must know how to handle their feelings to the babies and kids even if they make mistakes.
Second, they need to ask their students the reasons based on their mistakes and listen carefully first.

>>CORRECT!

Moreover, they need to understand their situations, find a solution if they can, and suggest it to the students making them right life.
>>
Moreover, they need to understand their situations, find a solution if they can, and suggest it to the students making them right.
Third, they should know that punishments are not suitable for the students.

>>CORRECT!

 If students understand what they did wrong, they will change mistakes to the correct since it’s a humans basic characteristic.

>>  If students understand what they did wrong, they will correct the mistakes since it’s a human\'s basic characteristic.

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