38. Homework

2018-01-04 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. Do you think modern technology is creating a single world culture? I think modern technology has been helped develop a single world culture. I have watched discussion program and I think that topic which was asked by a university student to the famous writer who had worked for Korean government at Ministry of Health & Welfare for 5 years was related with this sentence. She asked him about what kind of things made these poor cultures nowadays. He answered that having a hard time to do something was not only this generation but also our ancestors. This generation didn’t think about tomorrow’s food but the old generations always have thought about meals for the next day since they had poverty owing to the wars. But he agreed with her opinion since this generation called 3 PO-Generation(삼포세대). Before this generation, they had generous generations such as X-Generation, N-Generation, Orange-Generation and etc… and this kind of generations were hopeful. But now, 3 PO-Generation is not hopeful anymore since PO means give up and most of young people already gave up to do date, to get married, to give a birth owing to the fact that it’s a super hard to get a job and unstable workplaces. Furthermore, salary increase rate couldn't follow skyrocket inflation problems. At first, people who didn’t have a job tried improving their spec because they thought that they were not willing to get a job. So they had the best spec since Korea had established. Nevertheless they tried to solve it, they didn’t solve the problem. That’s why they started to blame this society because the older generation has made it. And he agreed with this and he also tried to solve this social problems but he couldn’t. While I was writing this yesterday, I noticed this writing was wrong with the question since I got misunderstand about the meaning of a single world culture. Anyhow, I just want to finish this answering since I already wrote a lot and I don’t want to throw this answering to the garbage. Hence, he said that the young generation has to interest in issues of our country and vote carefully who could change what their beliefs and dreams if they really eager to change the society. I agree with his opinion because rate of voting were always higher at old people because young generations, including me also, went out for a date or just take a rest during a vote day. I don’t know how to finish this, I am just writing to follow my stream of consciousness and I want to finish this now. Anyway, I want to say that I am just interested in watching discuss program since Korean had hard time to do because of previous government, not only president. Therefore, I have to vote for someone who can really work for citizen.

강사 첨삭

Whew! Thank you for writing this!

I am so happy I checked this, too! Ha! Ha!

We must be proactive, rather than reactive^^

We must stop blaming people for what we can\'t do, because our life depends on our words and actions^^

See you!

Q. Do you think modern technology is creating a single world culture?
>>CORRECT!
I think modern technology has been helped develop a single world culture.
>>I think modern technology has helped develop a single world culture.
 I have watched discussion program and I think that topic which was asked by a university student to the famous writer who had worked for Korean government at Ministry of Health & Welfare for 5 years was related with this sentence.

>> I have watched a discussion program and I think that topic which was asked by a university student to the famous writer who had worked for Korean government at Ministry of Health & Welfare for 5 years was related with this sentence.
She asked him about what kind of things made these poor cultures nowadays.
>>
She asked him about what kinds of things made these poor culture nowadays. 
He answered that having a hard time to do something was not only this generation but also our ancestors.
>>
He answered that having a hard time to do something did not only happen in this generation but also our ancestors.
This generation didn’t think about tomorrow’s food but the old generations always have thought about meals for the next day since they had poverty owing to the wars.
>>
This generation didn’t think about tomorrow’s food but the old generation had always thought about their meals for the next day since they experienced poverty owing to the wars.
But he agreed with her opinion since this generation called 3 PO-Generation(삼포세대).
>>
But he agreed with her opinion since this generation is called 3 PO-Generation(삼포세대).
Before this generation, they had generous generations such as X-Generation, N-Generation, Orange-Generation and etc… and this kind of generations were hopeful.
>>
Before this generation, they had generous generations such as X-Generation, N-Generation, Orange Generation and etc… and these kinds of generations were hopeful.
But now, 3 PO-Generation is not hopeful anymore since PO means give up and most of young people already gave up to do date, to get married, to give a birth owing to the fact that it’s a super hard to get a job and unstable workplaces.
>>
But now, 3 PO-Generation is not hopeful anymore since PO means give up and most of young people already gave up dating, getting married, and giving birth owing to the fact that it’s super hard to get a job at unstable workplaces.
Furthermore, salary increase rate couldn\'t follow skyrocket inflation problems.
>>CORRECT!
At first, people who didn’t have a job tried improving their spec because they thought that they were not willing to get a job.
>>CORRECT!
So they had the best spec since Korea had established.
>>Therefore,
they had the best qualification since Korea was established.
Nevertheless they tried to solve it, they didn’t solve the problem.
>>CORRECT!
That’s why they started to blame this society because the older generation has made it.
>>CORRECT!
And he agreed with this and he also tried to solve this social problems but he couldn’t.
>>
And he agreed with this and he also tried to solve this social problem but he couldn’t.
 While I was writing this yesterday, I noticed this writing was wrong with the question since I got misunderstand about the meaning of a single world culture.
>>
 While I was writing this yesterday, I noticed this writing was wrong since I got misunderstood the meaning of a single world culture.
Anyhow, I just want to finish this answering since I already wrote a lot and I don’t want to throw this answering to the garbage.
>>
Anyhow, I just want to finish this answer since I already wrote a lot and I don’t want to throw this to the garbage.
Hence, he said that the young generation has to interest in issues of our country and vote carefully who could change what their beliefs and dreams if they really eager to change the society.
>>
Hence, he said that the young generation has to be interested in the issues of our country and carefully vote for the people who could change their beliefs and dreams if they are really eager to change the society.
I agree with his opinion because rate of voting were always higher at old people because young generations, including me also, went out for a date or just take a rest during a vote day.
>>
I agree with his opinion because the rate of old voters was always higher, because young generation, including me, went out for a date or just take a rest during the election day.
I don’t know how to finish this, I am just writing to follow my stream of consciousness and I want to finish this now.
>>CORRECT!
Anyway, I want to say that I am just interested in watching discuss program since Korean had hard time to do because of previous government, not only president.
>>
Anyway, I want to say that I am just interested in watching a discussion program since Koreans had a hard time because of the previous government, not only the president.
Therefore, I have to vote for someone who can really work for citizen.

>> Therefore, I have to vote for someone who can really work for citizens.

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