3rd. homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
[ESSAY]
Explain why greetings are important in daily life.
Why greetings are important in my daily life, we are live in a society.
I\'m working in company, there are many people who is making success to everybody\' performance.
If I need a help by co-work, I try to use a proper greetings to other one.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ho!
Good job explaining why greetings matter at work! I like that you connected greetings to teamwork and asking for help. Next time, you could give an example of a greeting you use with your co-workers to make your paragraph even more concrete. Keep it up!
~Teacher Polly
>>Greetings are important in our daily life because we live in a society.
I\'m working in company, there are many people who is making success to everybody\' performance.
I\'m working in company, there are many people who is making success to everybody\' performance.
>>I work in a company, and there are many people who contribute to everyone’s performance.
If I need a help by co-work, I try to use a proper greetings to other one.
If I need a help by co-work, I try to use a proper greetings to other one.
>>If I need help from a co-worker, I try to use proper greetings with them.
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