3rd homework

2019-01-17 · 첨삭 강사 Alexia

학생이 쓴 원문

I think a song that has something similar to my life is \'Threshold of the Twilight\'. This is a song by \'Wax\', a Korean singer. This song is not exciting song and not sad, but it tell us about our lives and parent\'s lives. This song is not a hit song, but when I sang it in front of my parents, they told me that after many years, you will feel that this song is expressing our lives. I was in the early 20s at that time. But in a few years, I empathized with this song. (p.s It\'s on the translator) This song contains lyrics such as \"I was in love for the first time and then crying after a few days of painful separation, but I became a tall woman and experienced a tough world\", and lyrics such as \"My parents are old before I knew it\", and \"I\'ve changed a lot since I was them in the mirror.\"

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Hi [이름],

  Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

 

HOMEWORK:

Third homework

 

 

YOUR ANSWER:

I think a song that has something similar to my life is \'Threshold of the Twilight\'.
This is a song by \'Wax\', a Korean singer.
This song is not exciting song and not sad, but it tell us about our lives and parent\'s lives.
This song is not a hit song, but when I sang it in front of my parents, they told me that after many years, you will feel that this song is expressing our lives.
I was in the early 20s at that time.
But in a few years, I empathized with this song.

(p.s It\'s on the translator) This song contains lyrics such as \"I was in love for the first time and then crying after a few days of painful separation, but I became a tall woman and experienced a tough world\", and lyrics such as \"My parents are old before I knew it\", and \"I\'ve changed a lot since I was them in the mirror.\"

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CORRECTIONS: 

I think a song that has something similar to my life is \'Threshold of the Twilight\'. This is a song by \'Wax\', a Korean singer.
This song is not
an exciting and a sad one, but it tells us about our lives and parents’ lives.
This song is not a hit song, but when I sang it in front of my parents, they told me that after many years,
I will feel that this song is expressing our lives. I was in my early 20’s at that time. But after just a few years, I empathized with this song.

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P.S. It\'s on the translator) This song contains lyrics such as \"I was in love for the first time and then crying after a few days of painful separation. But I became a stronger woman who have experienced a tough world,\" and lyrics such as \"My parents are old before I knew it, \" and \"I\'ve changed a lot since I was them in the mirror.\"



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 ** Dear [이름], thank you for making time to share your thoughts in the homework. 😊 Please take note of the corrections. ^^

 Cheers!! Take care. J

 

  ---------T. Alexia----------    

                       

           

                         

                         

           

             

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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