4/10 homework

2020-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

학생이 쓴 원문

I don\'t agree about it, I think creativity starts from fresh or change of boredom. Human beings are easy to laziness. In other words, we can easily adapt to the environment where we are and easily stop thinking. There is no creativity there. Some people have a strong passion to change the environment and creativity comes from there. I think creativity appeared in the change of environment, not laziness. So, I understand that artists travel to many places and work. Maybe they want to get inspiration newly in a new environment. Creativity is a very good thing, but I think it\'s not from nothing. It grows more and more on the basis of the human mind. It\'s similar that children firstly draw what they can see and then draw imaginary ones later. When I wrote the first paper, I read a lot of papers and write similar sentences with them. Now, I can write the sentences that I want to say. I think it is a similar thing in creativity. In other words, creativity also comes from practice.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],
Thanks for this response. It is an insightful one as always:)
-Rachel 
I don\'t agree about it, I think creativity starts from fresh or change of boredom.
>> correct
Human beings are easy to laziness.
>> Human beings are prone to laziness. 
In other words, we can easily adapt to the environment where we are and easily stop thinking. 
There is no creativity there.
>> correct
Some people have a strong passion to change the environment and creativity comes from there.
>> correct (awesome)
I think creativity appeared in the change of environment, not laziness.
>> correct 
>> I think creativity emerged in the change of environment and not through laziness. 
So, I understand that artists travel to many places and work.
>> correct
So, I understand that artists travel to many places for work. 
Maybe they want to get inspiration newly in a new environment.
>> Maybe they want to get new inspiration in a new environment.
Creativity is a very good thing, but I think it\'s not from nothing.
>> correct
It grows more and more on the basis of the human mind.
>> Creativity gets bigger or enlarged in the human mind. 
It\'s similar that children firstly draw what they can see and then draw imaginary ones later.
>> correct
When I wrote the first paper, I read a lot of papers and write similar sentences with them.
>> correct (use about instead of with)
Now, I can write the sentences that I want to say.
>> correct
I think it is a similar thing in creativity.
>> correct 
In other words, creativity also comes from practice.
>> correct 

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