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2020-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I normally don\'t share my plans with other people. I don\'t hide it intentially, but usually people don\'t ask for my plans in the first place. I believe that there are plans that can be shared with others and plans that is so personal that it is rather not be told to anyone. People keep plans to themselves when they are not sure about the plan, or the plans are personal. The former is because thye don\'t want others to be concerned about something that isn\'t even decided. The latter is because the plans are one\'s privacy. Someone\'s personal philosophy about one thing is something that shoudn\'t be shared, for words have power and sometimes only saying it will make difference in relationship. For example, if I said that I wouldn\'t go to a position that repquires great responsibility when I get old, some might think that I am disperaging the old, regardless of what my intention was. Therefore some plans should rather be kept secret.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for doing your essay! Happy Monday! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I normally don\'t share my plans with other people.
>>> CORRECT
 I don\'t hide it intentially, but usually people don\'t ask for my plans in the first place. 
>>>  I don\'t hide it [intentionally], but usually people don\'t ask for my plans in the first place. 
I believe that there are plans that can be shared with others and plan that is so personal that it is rather not be told to anyone. 
>>> CORRECT
People keep plans to themselves when they are not sure about the plan, or the plans are personal. 
>>> CORRECT
The former is because thye don\'t want others to be concerned about something that isn\'t even decided. 
>>> The former is because [they] don\'t want others to be concerned about something that isn\'t even decided. 
The latter is because the plans are one\'s privacy.
>>> CORRECT
 Someone\'s personal philosophy about one thing is something that shouldn\'t be shared, for words have power and sometimes only saying it will make difference in relationship.
>>> CORRECT
 For example, if I said that I wouldn\'t go to a position that requires great responsibility when I get old, some might think that I am disparaging the old, regardless of what my intention was.
>>> CORRECT
 Therefore, some plans should rather be kept secret.
>>> CORRECT

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