4.13 homework
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Thank you for your homework, Ye [이름]!
Keep expressing your thoughts in English^^
-Hanna ^^
If they have their own business I’m not tell anything.
>>If they have their own business, then I can\'t say anything against it.
Because they need to money.
>>Because they need the money.
Also it is good for debt if they use it.
>>It is also okay to have a debt if they use it for that.
But if they use just play, I’m not like that.
>>But if they will use it just for leisure, I think it is not okay.
Like a gamble, drink, smoke, and buy sex.
>>Like gambling, drinking, smoking and buying sex.
If they use debt, it is good.
>>If the they used the money well, then it is okay.
But if they are not good to use debt, it is bad for themselves.
>>But if they use it in a bad way, then it is not good for them.
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