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2015-04-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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I think those people have a thrill on dangerous sports and activities, also when they success on the challenge they will feel joyful of it. Ski jump,for instance, is a one of the most dangerous sports which is flying up in the snow with skis. When I first saw a movie which subject is a "ski jump", I was so surprised because it looks like so scary and dangerous. But in the process of success of ski jump I can see the effort of ski jumpers.When they won the game they felt really happy like they won the lotter

강사 첨삭

Hello Su [이름],

We really need to experience a lot of things in life to learn and mature as a person.

We must do our best in order to be successful, but before we become successful we must undergo a certain training and sometimes it is dangerous.

I hope we can be successful in the future even if it is very difficult.

T. Jeny

 

I think those people have a thrill on dangerous sports and activities, also when they success on the challenge they will feel joyful of it.

>>I think those people like extreme sports and activities so whenever, they will be successful with the challenge, they will feel satisfation.

Ski jump,for instance, is a one of the most dangerous sports which is flying up in the snow with skis.

>>For example, ski jump, is one of the most dangerous sports which you have to fly up in the snow with the ski.
When I first saw a movie which subject is a \"ski jump\", I was so surprised because it looks like so scary and dangerous.

>>When I first saw a movie, which features \"ski jump,\" I was so surprised because it looks scary and dangerous.

 But in the process of success of ski jump I can see the effort of ski jumpers.

>>But on the process of success, the ski jumpers  are doing their best.

When they won the game they felt really happy like they won the lotter

>>When they won a game, they feel like they won the lottery.

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