4/13 Homework
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Hello Su [이름],
We really need to experience a lot of things in life to learn and mature as a person.
We must do our best in order to be successful, but before we become successful we must undergo a certain training and sometimes it is dangerous.
I hope we can be successful in the future even if it is very difficult.
T. Jeny
I think those people have a thrill on dangerous sports and activities, also when they success on the challenge they will feel joyful of it.
>>I think those people like extreme sports and activities so whenever, they will be successful with the challenge, they will feel satisfation.
Ski jump,for instance, is a one of the most dangerous sports which is flying up in the snow with skis.
>>For example, ski jump, is one of the most dangerous sports which you have to fly up in the snow with the ski.
When I first saw a movie which subject is a \"ski jump\", I was so surprised because it looks like so scary and dangerous.
>>When I first saw a movie, which features \"ski jump,\" I was so surprised because it looks scary and dangerous.
But in the process of success of ski jump I can see the effort of ski jumpers.
>>But on the process of success, the ski jumpers are doing their best.
When they won the game they felt really happy like they won the lotter
>>When they won a game, they feel like they won the lottery.
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