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I am a member of several organizations related to research such as WISET(Women in Science, Engineering and Technology), Korean Chemical Engineering, and Korea Vacuum Society.
WISET is an established organization to encourage women to advance into the science and engineering fields and protect their right.
Another two organizations are the academic party.
It is very important to share knowledge and improve their own research.
The academic activity from the organization is a domestic or international conference.
I like to attend there.
It is very easy to be a babe in the woods if researchers have been locked up in the lab and only experimented.
We should know how many people study a similar theme to me and how to improve the study and how to change the trend in the world.
Therefore, social activity in academic organizations is one of the important thing in research.
Sometimes it is similar to politics ironically.
Some people lead to society, and society moves according to their opinions.
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I am a member of several organizations related to research such as WISET(Women in Science, Engineering and Technology), Korean Chemical Engineering, and Korea Vacuum Society.
>> correct
WISET is an established organization to encourage women to advance into the science and engineering fields and protect their right.
WISET is an established organization to encourage women to advance into the science and engineering fields and protect their right.
>> correct (awesome sentence)
Another two organizations are the academic party.
Another two organizations are the academic party.
>> correct
>> The other two organizations belong to the academic party.
It is very important to share knowledge and improve their own research.
It is very important to share knowledge and improve their own research.
>> correct
The academic activity from the organization is a domestic or international conference.
The academic activity from the organization is a domestic or international conference.
>> correct
I like to attend there.
I like to attend there.
>> correct
>> I would like to attend the conference.
It is very easy to be a babe in the woods if researchers have been locked up in the lab and only experimented.
It is very easy to be a babe in the woods if researchers have been locked up in the lab and only experimented.
>> correct (nice use of expression)
We should know how many people study a similar theme to me and how to improve the study and how to change the trend in the world.
We should know how many people study a similar theme to me and how to improve the study and how to change the trend in the world.
>> correct (we just say people study a similar theme/ subject as I did instead of to me)
Therefore, social activity in academic organizations is one of the important thing in research.
Therefore, social activity in academic organizations is one of the important thing in research.
>> correct
Sometimes it is similar to politics ironically.
Sometimes it is similar to politics ironically.
>> correct
Some people lead to society, and society moves according to their opinions.
Some people lead to society, and society moves according to their opinions.
>> correct
>> Some people lead the society, and society moves according to their opinions.
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