4.14 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
> Is it necessary to have to hobby? Why?
First looking for an meaning of \'Hobby\', a hobby is an activity that we enjoy doing in our spare time. I think hobby is absolutely necessary for ourself. The activities make us happy and refreshed become motivation of life to keep going that\'s why we get to feel positive emotion with smile. I think hobby makes our life better than before or yesterday. As for me, I used to go to the gallery or museum for admiring artworks. These are to be costed. However, I never don\'t consider waste. It\'s because these are interesting and give me energy. These days, I consider i want to have another active and adventurous activites which can use my body. This hobby can hit two birds with one stone due to lose my weight and get interest.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Thank you for this. Trying out new things would be fun and new.
- T. Beth
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First looking for an meaning of \'Hobby\', a hobby is an activity that we enjoy doing in our spare time. >>> First, looking at the meaning of \'Hobby\', a hobby is an activity that we enjoy doing in our spare time.
I think hobby is absolutely necessary for ourself.
>>> I think a hobby is absolutely necessary for ourselves.
The activities make us happy and refreshed become motivation of life to keep going that\'s why we get to feel positive emotion with smile.
>>> The activities make us happy and refreshed and a motivation in life to keep us going that\'s why we get to feel positive emotion with a smile.
I think hobby makes our life better than before or yesterday.
>>> correct
As for me, I used to go to the gallery or museum for admiring artworks.
>>> OR: As for me, I used to go to the gallery or museum to admire artworks.
These are to be costed.
>>> Doing these costs me money.
However, I never don\'t consider waste.
>>> However, I never considered it as a waste.
It\'s because these are interesting and give me energy.
>>> correct
These days, I consider i want to have another active and adventurous activites which can use my body.
>>> These days, I am considering having another active and adventurous activities where I can use my body.
>>> OR: These days, I am considering trying out physically challenging activities.
This hobby can hit two birds with one stone due to lose my weight and get interest.
>>> This hobby can hit two birds with one stone which are losing weight and enjoying an interest.
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