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2020-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Is gun control an effective way to control crime? Explain your answer. I think gun control won\'t help to decrease the number of crimes. However, I think it helps in weakening crimes. It is undeniable that a gun can be a tool for self-protection. However, it can sometimes deepen some crimes that could be nothing. I am not sure whether allowing guns is reasonable or not. Though I am sure that gun control can control the level of crimes. Especially countries like ours, where accepting the range of self-defense is so small, the use of guns will most likely be judged as over-defense. Therefore, I believe that gun control can help to control crime in some ways.

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Hi there [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for finishing your essays. I hope to see you again someday! Continue to study hard!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Is gun control an effective way to control crime? Explain your answer.
I think gun control won\'t help to decrease the number of crimes. 
>>> CORRECT
However, I think it helps in weakening crimes.
>>> CORRECT
It is undeniable that a gun can be a tool for self-protection. 
>>> CORRECT
However, it can sometimes deepen some crimes that could be nothing.
>>> CORRECT
I am not sure whether allowing guns is reasonable or not.
>>> CORRECT
 Though I am sure that gun control can control the level of crimes. 
>>> CORRECT
Especially countries like ours, where accepting the range of self-defense is so small, the use of guns will most likely be judged as over-defense. 
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, I believe that gun control can help to control crime in some ways.
>>> CORRECT

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