4-18th Homework

2017-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was working everyday, I felt the rest to relax my muscles. Some others who smoke go out in order to smoke, therefore they have a relaxation without any intentions. But for people who don't smoke like me, if we don't have any intention for relaxing, we eventually get to work hard. So, whenever I enter the office, I think about the relax in the whole day. But it is also difficult to do steadily since I forget it when I work. Nowadays, I feel a muscle ache on my shoulder after waking up in the morning. I'm not sure whether it is caused by not relaxing during working or not. I have two guess about that. One is for not relaxing when I work, another is my pillow. I think my pillow is very low to sustain my neck and my head. So, after waking up in the morning, my shoulder's muscles become stiff. I will try to use another pillow which is more higher than the current pillow. When I swam, there was no muscle ache in my body. Even if there is muscle ache, it was disappeared after swimming.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! 

Thank you very much for taking the time to write on our composition board even if you\'re quite busy.

I honestly think the muscle aches on your shoulders are caused by too much stress.

Sometimes, you need to take it easy at work.

I discovered that eating right, getting enough sleep and doing relaxation techniques help relieve stress.

In addition to this, drinking plenty of water is also very helpful.

I hope you\'d get the chance to do all of these things.

I also hope the pain over your shoulders will go away soon.

I\'ll see you again next week.

Take a rest this weekend. :)
~Teacher C[이름]

When I was working everyday, I felt the rest to relax my muscles.

>> [Do you mean]: When I work everyday, I feel the need to rest and relax my muscles.
Some others who smoke go out in order to smoke, therefore they have a relaxation without any intentions.

>> Others who are smokers go out and smoke. Therefore, they are able to relax without intending to do it.

But for people who don\'t smoke like me, if we don\'t have any intention for relaxing, we eventually get to work hard.

>> But for people who don\'t smoke like me, if we don\'t have any intention to relax, we eventually get over worked.
So, whenever I enter the office, I think about the relax in the whole day.

>> So, whenever I enter the office, I think about relaxing the whole day.
But it is also difficult to do steadily since I forget it when I work.

>> But it is also difficult to do steadily do it since I forget it when I work.
Nowadays, I feel a muscle ache on my shoulder after waking up in the morning.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Nowadays, my shoulder aches after waking up in the morning.
I\'m not sure whether it is caused by not relaxing during working or not.

>> I\'m not sure whether it is caused by not relaxing at work or not.
I have two guess about that.

>> I have two guesses about that.
One is for not relaxing when I work, another is my pillow.

>> One is for not relaxing when I work and another one is because of my pillow.
I think my pillow is very low to sustain my neck and my head.

>> I think my pillow is too low to support my neck and my head.
So, after waking up in the morning, my shoulder\'s muscles become stiff.

>> So, after waking up in the morning, my shoulders\' muscles become stiff.
I will try to use another pillow which is more higher than the current pillow.

>> I will try to use another pillow which is higher than the current pillow.
When I swam, there was no muscle ache in my body.

>> When I swim, there is no muscle ache in my body.
 Even if there is muscle ache, it was disappeared after swimming.

>>  Even if there is a muscle ache, it disappears after swimming.

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