4-19th Homework

Hello there [이름]! ^_^

Thanks for writing an essay for today.

Your topic is really good because it\'s a growing global problem these days.

You\'re right when you said there are no safe places in the world today.

There is danger everywhere and I guess worrying won\'t make the place we live in better.

We just need to have more faith in humanity.

Terrorism and war brings about nothing but fear.

It is not productive and it is never helpful.

I hope these wars will end up soon.

Have a great day.
See you again tomorrow.

~Teacher C[이름]

Nowadays, we can often hear about the wars all over the world.

>> Nowadays, we often hear about the wars all over the world.

OR >> Nowadays, we can hear about the wars all over the world.
The most representative area is the middle Asia.

>> The most affected area is the Middle East.

Of course, two Korea are now fighting each other.

>> Of course, two Korean nations are now fighting with each other.
Actually, Korea war didn\'t end yet, it\'s because two Korea did a truce about 70 years ago.

>> Actually, Korea\'s war has not ended yet. It\'s because the two Korean nations  did a truce about 70 years ago.
So, some other foreigners who haven\'t came in Korea consider the war between two Korea when they come in Korea for the first time.

>> So, some/other foreigners who haven\'t come to Korea consider the war between the two Korean nations when they come to Korea for the first time.
On the other hand, many Koreans worry about the turmoil of the other countries when they want to trip there.

>> On the other hand, many Koreans worry about the turmoil of the other countries when they want to go on a trip there.
Nowadays, there are no places in safe.

>> Nowadays, there are no safe places.
If we are in the Europe, we have to consider about the terror committed by terrorist.

>> If we are in Europe, we have to consider about the terror committed by terrorists.
If we make a trip to middle east of Asia, we also must worry about the war between so-called IS and other countries. 

>> If we book for a trip to the Middle East, we also must worry about the war between the so-called IS and other countries. 
When we go to south America, in first we are anxious about the kidnap.

>> When we go to South America, we are anxious about the kidnappings.
Especially, in this 21th century there are more wars than 20th, I think.

>>  I think there are more wars in the 21st century compared to the 20th century.
It\'s because the internet has been developed ever since it was first invented.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> This is because the internet has developed massively since it was first invented.
We could easily reach the news using it.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> We could easily grasp the news through it.