4/2 homework

2020-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

학생이 쓴 원문

It depends on age. But, at my age, screen golf is the most popular hobby for men. Women have many kinds of hobbies according to their personalities. But, one day class is very popular. We can experience many things from a one-day class such as tea, flower arrangement, cooking, baking and so on. It is also arranged for a trip. I think it is a good response to the needs of this era. People are very busy and although they say balance between work and life, they don\'t have much time for themselves. The one-day class is light and fun and makes them feel like they have learned something. We don\'t need to go to the academy regularly. There are some applications for finding a one-day class in my village. When I want to learn or experience, we can easily find and resist in the internet. It is very useful when I go on a trip to other city. I like the one-day class for tea tasting. I can experience many kinds of tea and learn how to make tea correctly.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for the response as always [이름]! This is an interesting response. I had fun reading it:) Also, the sentences are perfect, so great job!
-Rachel
It depends on age. But, at my age, screen golf is the most popular hobby for men.
>> correct
Women have many kinds of hobbies according to their personalities. 
But, one day class is very popular.
>> correct
We can experience many things from a one-day class such as tea, flower arrangement, cooking, baking and so on. It is also arranged for a trip.
>> correct
I think it is a good response to the needs of this era.
>> correct
People are very busy and although they say balance between work and life, they don\'t have much time for themselves. The one-day class is light and fun and makes them feel like they have learned something.
>> correct
We don\'t need to go to the academy regularly. There are some applications for finding a one-day class in my village.
>> correct
When I want to learn or experience, we can easily find and resist in the internet.I t is very useful when I go on a trip to other city.
>> correct
I like the one-day class for tea tasting. I can experience many kinds of tea and learn how to make tea correctly.
>> correct

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