4-20th Homework

2017-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Nobody dislikes new ones and nobody dislikes to buy new ones, if they could afford it. I also like to change old things into new things even if the old things operate well. Maybe, everybody is avid for the new things. But there are several types for them to execute their desire. One of several types, like me, is unable to buy the new ones for a long time. They just watch and search for it, and they want to buy it everyday but they don't. In their head, there is always the mind that they must not waste something, including money. Anyway, if someone see them, they would think that they laboriously live. Another type, like my wife, is promptly to buy the goods, if she feel the need about it. So, this person don't hesitate buying something. The others always buy the new things launched right now. They also don't wait for a time to consider whether they need or not. Of course, above all persons are very happy, it's because they can do it if they want to do it. To buy new things is good.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^_^
How\'s your Friday going so far?

I hope it\'s not too busy. 

Thanks for finding the time to write an essay on our composition board. 

I am a very practical kind of person and I don\'t like spending money on material things.

I think buying things that you don\'t need is ridiculous. 

If I were in these people\'s shoes, I would choose to buy experiences than material things.

I would choose to spend money on traveling rather than buy an expensive gadget.

Anyway, buying something for yourself is okay sometimes.

But buying something new all the time is not good because it is called impulsive buying and it\'s a form of addiction.

This is my point-of-view in this matter. :)

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you on Tuesday!

~Teacher C[이름] ^^

Nobody dislikes new ones and nobody dislikes to buy new ones, if they could afford it.

>> [Do you mean]: Nobody would refuse having new things and nobody would refuse buying new things if they could afford it.
I also like to change old things into new things even if the old things operate well.

>> I also like to change old things with new things even if the old things operate well.
Maybe, everybody is avid for the new things.

>> Maybe, everybody is an avid fan of new things.
But there are several types for them to execute their desire.

>> But there are several ways for them to achieve their desire.
One of several types, like me, is unable to buy the new ones for a long time.
>> [Do you mean]: Some people like me, are not able to buy new things for a long time.
They just watch and search for it, and they want to buy it everyday but they don\'t.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> They just watch and look for it and they have the urge to buy it everyday but they don\'t.
In their head, there is always the mind that they must not waste something, including money.

>> In their head, they think that they must not waste something, including money.
Anyway, if someone see them, they would think that they laboriously live.

>> Anyway, if someone sees them, that person would think that they live a laborious life.
Another type, like my wife, is promptly to buy the goods, if she feel the need about it.

>> Another type like my wife, promptly buys goods if she feel the need for it.
So, this person don\'t hesitate buying something.

>> So, this person doesn\'t hesitate in buying something.
The others always buy the new things launched right now.

>> The others always buy the newly launched things right now.
They also don\'t wait for a time to consider whether they need or not.

>> They also don\'t wait for a time to consider whether they need it or not.
Of course, above all persons are very happy, it\'s because they can do it if they want to do it.

>> [Do you mean]: Of course, they are happier than other people because they can do what they want to do.
To buy new things is good.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Buying new things is good.

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