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2020-04-23 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I think when the government wants to do something, the support from the National Assembly is very necessary. In the previous National Assembly, the seats of 80% in the parliamentary are owned by two parties. And two parties were almost equally divided the seats by 40%. However, the opposing party has undermined the government\'s driving force either by opposing or criticizing all government decisions. I understand that dictatorship is incorrect, and the co-existence of political parties with diverse opinions can help to become a correct government. But, often it either disables the government or disturbs the country\'s development and safety. Therefore, at this moment, I think this situation is better than beforehand. However, I believe that politicians and political parties can corrupt any time, and it can be prevented by the surveillance of the public. I support this government, but it is not blind support. If they do wrong politics, I will always blame them.

강사 첨삭

Good Morning [이름], 
I wasn\'t expecting a response to this homework, but thanks for giving me one. It is an interesting response. 
-Rachel
I think when the government wants to do something, the support from the National Assembly is very necessary.
>> correct
In the previous National Assembly, the seats of 80% in the parliamentary are owned by two parties.
>> In the previous National Assembly, 80% of the seats in the parliamentary was occupied by two parties. 
And two parties were almost equally divided the seats by 40%.
>> And the two parties equally divided the seats to 40 % respectively. 
However, the opposing party has undermined the government\'s driving force either by opposing or criticizing all government decisions.
>> correct
I understand that dictatorship is incorrect, and the co-existence of political parties with diverse opinions can help to become a correct government.
>> I understand that dictatorship is troublesome, and the co-existence of political parties with diverse opinions can help balance the governance. 
But, often it either disables the government or disturbs the country\'s development and safety.
>> correct
Therefore, at this moment, I think this situation is better than beforehand.
>> correct
However, I believe that politicians and political parties can corrupt any time, and it can be prevented by the surveillance of the public.
>> However, I believe that politicians and political parties can become corrupt any time, but it can be prevented by the  constant monitoring of the public. 
I support this government, but it is not blind support.
>> correct
If they do wrong politics, I will always blame them.
>> correct

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