4/22 homework
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I don\'t agree with the topic.
We need balanced nutrition with carbohydrates, fats, proteins, inorganic salts, vitamins, and so on.
Eating unbalanced meals generate nutritional deficiency for our health.
I often lead to obesity or low body weight.
The food materials have various nutrition with both good and bad components.
I saw a TV program about the health of high-level vegetarians including masters in the Buddhist faith.
In general, we think the health of vegetarians is better than the people who like to eat meat and beef.
However, their health condition was not good and they have insufficient nutrition.
It makes their bone weak and they have anemia.
I believe that eating delicious food is one of the happiness in our life.
I understand that many animals have been victimizing to be the food for human\'s meal and many meat processes are cruel.
However, we live in a world where the stronger prey upon the weaker.
Under the proper boundary, we should live and survive in this world.
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Wow! Wonderful thoughts on this one. Chan School of Public Health, which said that while eating a plant-based diet can reduce the risk of heart disease, not all vegetarian or vegan foods are beneficial for health. Cutting meat out does not necessarily lead to a healthier diet if what is left in are unhealthy foods such as potatoes, fruit juices or sweets. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I don\'t agree with the topic.
>>Correct OR
>>I don\'t agree with the statement.
We need balanced nutrition with carbohydrates, fats, proteins, inorganic salts, vitamins, and so on.
We need balanced nutrition with carbohydrates, fats, proteins, inorganic salts, vitamins, and so on.
>>Correct
Eating unbalanced meals generate nutritional deficiency for our health.
Eating unbalanced meals generate nutritional deficiency for our health.
>>Eating unbalanced meals generate nutritional deficiency and can greatly affect our health.
I often lead to obesity or low body weight.
I often lead to obesity or low body weight.
>>It often leads to either obesity or low body weight.
The food materials have various nutrition with both good and bad components.
The food materials have various nutrition with both good and bad components.
>>Correct
I saw a TV program about the health of high-level vegetarians including masters in the Buddhist faith.
I saw a TV program about the health of high-level vegetarians including masters in the Buddhist faith.
>>Correct
In general, we think the health of vegetarians is better than the people who like to eat meat and beef.
In general, we think the health of vegetarians is better than the people who like to eat meat and beef.
>>Correct
However, their health condition was not good and they have insufficient nutrition.
However, their health condition was not good and they have insufficient nutrition.
>>Correct
It makes their bone weak and they have anemia.
It makes their bone weak and they have anemia.
>>It made their bones weak and they have anemia
I believe that eating delicious food is one of the happiness in our life.
I believe that eating delicious food is one of the happiness in our life.
>>I believe that eating delicious food is one of the happiness in our lives.
>>I believe that eating delicious food is one that makes us happy.
I understand that many animals have been victimizing to be the food for human\'s meal and many meat processes are cruel.
I understand that many animals have been victimizing to be the food for human\'s meal and many meat processes are cruel.
>>I understand that many animals are slaughtered for human consumption and meat preparation is cruel.
However, we live in a world where the stronger prey upon the weaker.
However, we live in a world where the stronger prey upon the weaker.
>>However, we live in a world where the stronger prey upon the weak.
Under the proper boundary, we should live and survive in this world.
Under the proper boundary, we should live and survive in this world.
>>Correct
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