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2020-04-23 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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If it is very emergency, I definitely help the stranger. Unfortunately, the world is really bleak these days. Some people pretend to ask for help in order to cheat, and sometimes try to help others, but rather be misunderstood as criminals. So, many people become more individualistic and hesitate to help others. I remember one movie, it was really shocking because a man killed people who didn\'t help when his wife was killed by a stranger on the street. The movie made me think a lot about individualism. We can easily see the news that some people were killed by strangers on the street but nobody helped them. The very sad thing is that if someone could help them immediately, they could live. If I save someone\'s life, there would be no greater reward than that in my life. However, when we help a stranger at night, we should look cautiously around and shout to ask other people for help. And helping the elderly or giving a smile to someone who looks so sad is also very worthwhile.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],
Whoah! That was the quickest homework you did! Thanks for the interesting response as always:) Also, most of the sentences are perfect, so keep it up!
-Rachel
If it is very emergency, I definitely help the stranger.
>> If it is an emergency or if it is urgent, I would definitely help the stranger. 
Unfortunately, the world is really bleak these days.
>> correct (awesome use of vocabulary)
Some people pretend to ask for help in order to cheat, and sometimes try to help others, but rather be misunderstood as criminals.
>> correct
So, many people become more individualistic and hesitate to help others.
>> correct
I remember one movie, it was really shocking because a man killed people who didn\'t help when his wife was killed by a stranger on the street.
>> correct
The movie made me think a lot about individualism.
>> correct
We can easily see the news that some people were killed by strangers on the street but nobody helped them.
>> correct
The very sad thing is that if someone could help them immediately, they could live.
>> correct
If I save someone\'s life, there would be no greater reward than that in my life.
>> correct
However, when we help a stranger at night, we should look cautiously around and shout to ask other people for help.
And helping the elderly or giving a smile to someone who looks so sad is also very worthwhile.
>> correct

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