4-24th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Modern society is very complicated to understand all things in our surroundings.
In modern society there are many things in order to maintain itself.
To sustain our society, we make nations in big and make families in small.
And we also need a lot of money for the maintenance of the nation, which is a tax.
Families also require enough money to keep the life of its members.
If members don't have a job, the nation could not collect the money, that is the tax, to keep the organization.
The tax system is very diverse and complex to understand without accountants' help.
In the ancient, this was very simple so that everyone could fully understand the tax.
Nowadays, the tax system is so complex and we have to make laws relating the tax.
But the more the tax is complex, the more the riches couldn't pay their taxes.
Because the tax's law is complex, there are also many holes not to pay taxes.
As a result, the governor makes other law to prevent this so that the law becomes complex even more.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! ^_^
Thanks for writing an essay.
Thanks for writing an essay.
Taxes are very helpful in sustaining and protecting a nation.
However, it is often misused by greedy and corrupt government officials.
In my opinion, the bigger the government is, the more taxes we have to pay.
The more taxes that we pay, the more greedy our politicians become.
This has been the cycle in my country and my current president is doing his best to fight it.
Anyhow, I am really curious about how your government manages your taxes.
I hope you\'re having a great day. See you next week. ^^
~Teacher C[이름] :)
Modern society is very complicated to understand all things in our surroundings.>> [Do you mean]: Modern society is very complicated and all things in our surroundings are difficult to understand.
In modern society there are many things in order to maintain itself.
>> In modern society, there are many things that you need in order to sustain yourself.
To sustain our society, we make nations in big and make families in small.
To sustain our society, we make nations in big and make families in small.
>> To sustain our society, we make our nations big and make our families small.
And we also need a lot of money for the maintenance of the nation, which is a tax.
And we also need a lot of money for the maintenance of the nation, which is a tax.
>> And we also need a lot of money for the maintenance of the nation, which is called tax
Families also require enough money to keep the life of its members.
Families also require enough money to keep the life of its members.
>> Families also require enough money to keep the family members alive.
If members don\'t have a job, the nation could not collect the money, that is the tax, to keep the organization.
If members don\'t have a job, the nation could not collect the money, that is the tax, to keep the organization.
>> If the members don\'t have a job, the nation could not collect tax and could not keep the organization running.
The tax system is very diverse and complex to understand without accountants\' help.
The tax system is very diverse and complex to understand without accountants\' help.
>> The tax system is very diverse and complex to understand without an accountants\' help.
In the ancient, this was very simple so that everyone could fully understand the tax.
In the ancient, this was very simple so that everyone could fully understand the tax.
>> In the ancient times, this was made very simple so that everyone could fully understand the tax system.
Nowadays, the tax system is so complex and we have to make laws relating the tax.
>> Nowadays, the tax system is so complex and we have to make laws related to it.
But the more the tax is complex, the more the riches couldn\'t pay their taxes.
But the more the tax is complex, the more the riches couldn\'t pay their taxes.
>> But the more that the tax system become complex, the more that the rich couldn\'t pay their taxes.
Because the tax\'s law is complex, there are also many holes not to pay taxes.
Because the tax\'s law is complex, there are also many holes not to pay taxes.
>> Because the tax law is complex, there are also many loop holes in it.
As a result, the governor makes other law to prevent this so that the law becomes complex even more.
>> [Do you mean]: As a result, the government makes more laws to cover these loopholes which makes the law even more complex.
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