4-25th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
We need various nutritive elements to balance our body and the food is the essential thing to be satisfied with this condition.
To get the food, we are farming on everywhere, for example, the sea, the land, and so on.
Collecting some food in this era is not main industry.
In this era, main industry that human considers importantly is the electronics or the car industry.
I think this industry is not essential to keep our life.
Even if it doesn't operate well, we just feel inconvenient.
But the agriculture that makes a food doesn't work well, we have to be hungry and we could eventually die.
The agriculture is very sensitive with the weather.
After the industrial revolution, many machine has been invented to increase the efficiency of the agriculture.Even if the tools increase the efficiency, the most important element is the weather.
Many plants or crops are bitterly influenced by the weather.
Many farmers irrigate their crops but it wouldn't enough to fresh when the drought is serious.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! ^^
It is true that your best friend and greatest enemy in farming is the weather.
This is because the weather has always been unpredictable.
Right now, I think the weather is beating down hard on your country.
There hasn\'t been any substantial rain in Korea for the past several weeks and I think this has worried a lot of Korean farmers.
Water is life.
Without water, plants, animals and even humans would cease to exist.
It\'s a good thing that the rainy season would start in your country any time soon.
I\'m really happy about it. :)
I hope you\'re doing great.
Take care always.
~Teacher C[이름]
We need various nutritive elements to balance our body and the food is the essential thing to be satisfied with this condition.
>> We need various nutritive elements to balance our body and food is the primary source of it.
To get the food, we are farming on everywhere, for example, the sea, the land, and so on.
>> To get food, we are farm everywhere; for example, the sea, the land, and so on.
Collecting some food in this era is not main industry.
>> Collecting some food in this era is not the main industry.
In this era, main industry that human considers importantly is the electronics or the car industry.
>> In this era, the main industry that humans consider most importantly is either electronics or the automobile industry.
I think this industry is not essential to keep our life.
>> I think this industry is not essential to sustain our lives.
Even if it doesn\'t operate well, we just feel inconvenient.
>> [Do you mean]: When it doesn\'t operate well, we just feel inconvenient.
But the agriculture that makes a food doesn\'t work well, we have to be hungry and we could eventually die.
>> But in agriculture, if we don\'t produce enough food, we would go hungry and we could eventually die.
The agriculture is very sensitive with the weather.
>> [Do you mean]: Agriculture/Farming gravitates around the weather.
After the industrial revolution, many machine has been invented to increase the efficiency of the agriculture.
>> After the industrial revolution, many machines have been invented to increase the efficiency in agriculture
Even if the tools increase the efficiency, the most important element is the weather.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Even if the tools have massively improved efficiency, the weather is still the most important element.
Many plants or crops are bitterly influenced by the weather.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many plants or crops are greatly affected by the weather.
Many farmers irrigate their crops but it wouldn\'t enough to fresh when the drought is serious.
>> Many farmers irrigate their crops but it wouldn\'t be enough to keep them alive when the drought is serious.
It is true that your best friend and greatest enemy in farming is the weather.
This is because the weather has always been unpredictable.
Right now, I think the weather is beating down hard on your country.
There hasn\'t been any substantial rain in Korea for the past several weeks and I think this has worried a lot of Korean farmers.
Water is life.
Without water, plants, animals and even humans would cease to exist.
It\'s a good thing that the rainy season would start in your country any time soon.
I\'m really happy about it. :)
I hope you\'re doing great.
Take care always.
~Teacher C[이름]
We need various nutritive elements to balance our body and the food is the essential thing to be satisfied with this condition.
>> We need various nutritive elements to balance our body and food is the primary source of it.
To get the food, we are farming on everywhere, for example, the sea, the land, and so on.
>> To get food, we are farm everywhere; for example, the sea, the land, and so on.
Collecting some food in this era is not main industry.
>> Collecting some food in this era is not the main industry.
In this era, main industry that human considers importantly is the electronics or the car industry.
>> In this era, the main industry that humans consider most importantly is either electronics or the automobile industry.
I think this industry is not essential to keep our life.
>> I think this industry is not essential to sustain our lives.
Even if it doesn\'t operate well, we just feel inconvenient.
>> [Do you mean]: When it doesn\'t operate well, we just feel inconvenient.
But the agriculture that makes a food doesn\'t work well, we have to be hungry and we could eventually die.
>> But in agriculture, if we don\'t produce enough food, we would go hungry and we could eventually die.
The agriculture is very sensitive with the weather.
>> [Do you mean]: Agriculture/Farming gravitates around the weather.
After the industrial revolution, many machine has been invented to increase the efficiency of the agriculture.
>> After the industrial revolution, many machines have been invented to increase the efficiency in agriculture
Even if the tools increase the efficiency, the most important element is the weather.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Even if the tools have massively improved efficiency, the weather is still the most important element.
Many plants or crops are bitterly influenced by the weather.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many plants or crops are greatly affected by the weather.
Many farmers irrigate their crops but it wouldn\'t enough to fresh when the drought is serious.
>> Many farmers irrigate their crops but it wouldn\'t be enough to keep them alive when the drought is serious.
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