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2013-02-15 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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REFERENCES SELF-INTRODUCTION It's a great pleasure to have an opportunity to introduce myself to you. I am an applicant applying for the public relation & business marketing management position of your company. My name is [이름]. I was born in Seoul in 1985 and have lived there since then. I am twenty seven years old. I am 180 centimeters tall and weigh seventy kilograms. My motto is to live in sincerely and honestly. With my have experience of sales and public relation training background, I wish to apply for a public relation & business marketing management position. I have been working steadily after entering a university at Soul Digital University and Canon camera sales department. I worked as an expert in the service industry and It was a valuable experience to make me realize how important PR was, to succeed in their business regardless of job classification.

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Very good introduction! Anyway Sir, do not forget to include your interests and likes in life. For example, your hobbies and your lifestyle. -Teacher Chloe REFERENCES>>Your references could be your professors when you were a college student or the managers you had when you worked. SELF-INTRODUCTIONIt\'s a great pleasure to have an opportunity to introduce myself to you. >>Correct! I am an applicant applying for the public relation & business marketing management position of your company. >>I am applying for the public relation & business marketing management position of your company. My name is [이름]. >>Correct! I was born in Seoul in 1985 and have lived there since then. >>Correct! I am twenty seven years old. >>Correct!I am 180 centimeters tall and weigh seventy kilograms. >>Correct! My motto is to live in sincerely and honestly. >>Correct!With my have experience of sales and public relation training background, I wish to apply for a public relation & business marketing management position. >>Correct!I have been working steadily after entering a university at Soul Digital University and Canon camera sales department. >>I have been working steadily in Canon sales department after I graduate from Seould Digital University. I worked as an expert in the service industry and It was a valuable experience to make me realize how important PR was, to succeed in their business regardless of job classification. >>Correct! >>I worked as an expert in the service industry and it was a valuable experience to make me realize how important PR was, to succeed in their business regardless of job classification

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