4-26th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
The apartment is one type among the various house types, which is popular in Korea.
The price of the apartment might be more than single house having yard.
The apartment's price after buying would often increase, it's because there are many wants.
So, living in the apartment was the symbol of wealth.
The apartment's price is very various.
The more we want to go into Seoul, the more the price is expensive.
Personally, I don't like this living style.
Maybe, many people don't like but they could not select it freely, it's because of the money.
Actually, I hope to live in the house with the yard and without noise from upper layer.
And I hope to live in the house that I don't worry about my noise it can excuse to my lower layer.
Korea is very small country and many people want to live in Seoul.
It's because there are a lot of jobs.
If there is a job in local area, they would live there.
In local area, the price of house is less expensive than Seoul.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! :)
I think all types of houses are expensive. kkk.
If you prefer to live in the urban areas, having an apartment can be quite convenient.
There\'s a round-the-clock security and the parking area is good.
However, if you choose to stay in the suburbs or in the rural area, it would be best to have your own house with a yard.
This offers you more peace and serenity.
When I retire, I want to live in the country side.
Anyhow, that is just my opinion in this matter.
Have a great day! ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
The apartment is one type among the various house types, which is popular in Korea.>> The apartment is among the various types of houses, which is popular in Korea.
The price of the apartment might be more than single house having yard.
The price of the apartment might be more than single house having yard.
>> The price of an apartment might be higher than a single house having a yard.
The apartment\'s price after buying would often increase, it\'s because there are many wants.
The apartment\'s price after buying would often increase, it\'s because there are many wants.
>> The apartment\'s price after its purchase would often increase because it is in-demand.
So, living in the apartment was the symbol of wealth.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> That\'s why living in an apartment was a symbol of wealth.
The apartment\'s price is very various.
The apartment\'s price is very various.
>> The apartment\'s price varies.
The more we want to go into Seoul, the more the price is expensive.
>> The more that we want to go to Seoul, the more that the price becomes expensive.
Personally, I don\'t like this living style.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Personally speaking, I am not into this kind of living.
Maybe, many people don\'t like but they could not select it freely, it\'s because of the money.
Maybe, many people don\'t like but they could not select it freely, it\'s because of the money.
>> Maybe, many people don\'t like it either but they could not select it freely because of the money.
Actually, I hope to live in the house with the yard and without noise from upper layer.
Actually, I hope to live in the house with the yard and without noise from upper layer.
>> [Do you mean]: Actually, I hope to live in a house with a yard and is not noisy.
And I hope to live in the house that I don\'t worry about my noise it can excuse to my lower layer.
>> I also hope to live in a house where I don\'t have to worry about the noise I make and the people who would be complaining from downstairs.
Korea is very small country and many people want to live in Seoul.
>> Korea is a very small country and many people want to live in Seoul.
It\'s because there are a lot of jobs.
It\'s because there are a lot of jobs.
>> It\'s because there are a lot of jobs there.
If there is a job in local area, they would live there.
If there is a job in local area, they would live there.
>> If there is a job in the local area, they would live there.
In local area, the price of house is less expensive than Seoul.
In local area, the price of house is less expensive than Seoul.
>> In the local area, the price of a house is less expensive than Seoul.
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