4.27 homework

2023-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

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I think that open mind is very important. Because nowadays there’s many various people. Like gay, transgender etc. But when I have a prejudge about that, I can loss good friends because of my prejudge. So it is very important to open mind. It can make good friends.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for your homework, Ye [이름]!
Practice goes a long way!
-Hanna ^^
I think that open mind is very important.
>>I think that having an open mind is very important.
Because nowadays there’s many various people.
>>Because nowadays, there different people with different cultures.
Like gay, transgender etc.
>>Like gay, transgender, etc.
But when I have a prejudge about that, I can loss good friends because of my prejudge.
>>But when I judge them about that, I can lose good friends because of being judgemental.
So it is very important to open mind.
>>So it is very important to be open minded.
It can make good friends.
>>You can make good friends out of it.

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