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2019-04-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[With the development of modern society is the loss of traditional ways of life. Is it important to keep our traditional ways of life?] I think that it is important to make a balance between development and protection of our traditional things. I know it\'s difficult to do both of them. However, I remember the words \"no future to the person to forget the history\". Nowadays, we are developing very quickly. Lifestyle also is changing day by day. We have advantage and disadvantage with the development. When I was a kid, I make my friends in the playground. But now, the kids make friends on the internet with SNS. I remember our family used to go to a big mart all together on weekends. We talked to each other and have dinner after shopping. However, now we just order to the market and we receive the foods at home.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate it. Nice thoughts on this one. Keep it up! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

I think that it is important to make a balance between development and protection of our traditional things. 
>>Correct
I know it\'s difficult to do both of them. 
>>Correct
However, I remember the words \"no future to the person to forget the history\".
>>However, I remember the words \"no future for the person who forgets history\".
Nowadays, we are developing very quickly. 
>>Correct
Lifestyle also is changing day by day.
>>Correct
We have advantage and disadvantage with the development. 
>>We have advantages and disadvantages with the development. 
When I was a kid, I make my friends in the playground.
>>When I was a kid, I made friends with the children on the playground.
But now, the kids make friends on the internet with SNS. 
>>Correct
I remember our family used to go to a big mart all together on weekends.
>>Correct
We talked to each other and have dinner after shopping.
>>Correct
However, now we just order to the market and we receive the foods at home.
>>Correct

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