4.3 homework

2023-04-03 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

학생이 쓴 원문

I think that 13-14 is best owning to smartphone. When the smartphone is not invention, they have a phone when they adult. But after smartphone is invention, the age of owning a smartphone has become younger. It is not good for children brain. And also it is easy to be exposed to provocative things. But if they don’t have smartphone, they are difficult to make friends. Nevertheless, I think that later given smartphone is better than younger.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for your homework, Ye [이름]!
Keep up the great work!
-Hanna ^^
I think that 13-14 is best owning to smartphone.
>>I think ages 13-14 is the best age for owning a smartphone.
When the smartphone is not invention, they have a phone when they adult.
>>If the smartphone is not yet invented now, they will have one when they become an adult.
But after smartphone is invention, the age of owning a smartphone has become younger.
>>But after smartphone was invented, the age of owning one has become younger.
It is not good for children brain.
>>It is not good for children\'s young mind.
And also it is easy to be exposed to provocative things.
>>Correct.
But if they don’t have smartphone, they are difficult to make friends.
>>But if they don\'t have smartphones, they will find it difficult to make friends.
Nevertheless, I think that later given smartphone is better than younger.
>>Nevertheless, I think it is better to have a smartphone when you\'re older.

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